Human Hatred, ...just a poem... |
 Apr 23 2005, 05:47 PM
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Human Hatred
Grind my heart ...the silly thing... Puree the parts ...this uneeded thing... Make it blend ...the useless thing... So it'll never mend ...this broken thing... My hearts not needed ...the dead thing... This hates superseded ...this unholy thing... All for you ..the whole thing... A feeling so new ...this deadly thing... Hatred fuels me ...the unending thing... It's set me free ...this blasphemous thing... |
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Apr 23 2005, 05:57 PM
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It doesnt sound like " human hated " it sound be something about " love " or " emotion", i think. Your poem is good but short.
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VVicke[) Human Hatred Apr 23 2005, 05:47 PM
Spirited Away Beautiful.
Though, I'm not sure if the title... Apr 23 2005, 05:53 PM VVicke[) I named it such because that's what I was feel... Apr 23 2005, 06:05 PM Spirited Away ^ah, it makes sense. Apr 23 2005, 06:38 PM
VVicke[) Thank you... though it could be named better.. I l... Apr 23 2005, 06:49 PM |
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