Steed, a poem |
 Apr 21 2005, 08:23 PM
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 dripping destruction  Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 7,282 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 21,929  |
Steed (04\14/05)
The scent of the car is a familiar one left lingering when new-car-smell is gone the smell of gasoline- so familiar welcoming with open arms the troubles of behind are now past and he's driving away ------he's driving away ------------driving away ---------------------away away from troubles in his life and away from the people in his life he runs to his car, a faithful steed and spurs it on, through the red to his death and his release. Steed ©2005 by me. //EDIT// i changed 'to his death and release' to 'to his death and his release'. the syllables just didn't seem right... |
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Apr 23 2005, 01:25 AM
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 I'd rather make mistakes than break. Group: Member Posts: 121 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 117,869 |
Wow. I like this a lot. Especially this line:
QUOTE the troubles of behind are now past It really gives the affect of him leaving behind his troubles, and the emotion behind the poem is intriguing -- the fact that his only escape even means death.and he's driving away ------he's driving away ------------driving away ---------------------away Mucho love, Alyson |
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sadolakced acid Steed Apr 21 2005, 08:23 PM
gladz612 this is really cute... Apr 21 2005, 11:32 PM sadolakced acid CUTE?!?
did you read the last two lines? Apr 22 2005, 04:31 PM xSWEETxCANDiix Wow..that's tragic. I like it. Hahah..cute? ... Apr 23 2005, 12:30 AM WhiteLotus* I like it a lot.
I can see a lot of emotion. Ver... Apr 23 2005, 01:21 AM
stephinika well written and like alyson said, the spaces add ... Apr 23 2005, 04:48 PM |
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