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 Apr 19 2005, 11:06 PM
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Feelings rise to the top,
Love fizzles and pops, And then my heart stops. My skin, it tingles, As the tears drop in singles, Panting from my chest, Close my eyes to rest, Because life is a climb, We work all the time, My heart still sings, For wind in my wings, To be able to fly, And let my worries die, I still wish for hope, I'm bound in golden rope, It keeps me together, Always fairing rough weather, Never taming my passion, In any form or fashion, Now I'm ready to go, Just wanted you to know. |
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Apr 20 2005, 04:28 AM
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 Holla if ya hate me  Group: Member Posts: 2,386 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 80,819 |
Awesome, I like this one as well. If worded correctly it could be a rap!! Ahhh thats just my random thought XD
I like the flow, the pace of it. I also like the message you were trying to convey, im not sure what im thinking is what you were trying to show but its all in how the reader interprets it right? 
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islandgirl4eva progression Apr 19 2005, 11:06 PM
stephinika ooh, i quite like this actually. the rhyming schem... Apr 19 2005, 11:07 PM RiddleMeWonders I love. Refreshing. Bravo. Apr 19 2005, 11:09 PM
islandgirl4eva QUOTE(Funky Buddha @ Apr 20 2005, 4:28 AM)Awe... Apr 20 2005, 09:15 PM nightmare4taki *claps* BRAVO! Keep up the good work. Apr 20 2005, 02:18 PM gladz612 i love this one. Apr 21 2005, 11:38 AM |
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