*winces*, i think i may have gone too emo here Options

[racoons > you]

twist the loose tooth
snap
a little bit of blood
and a shiny quarter for mr pig
turn the switch
click
a little bit of dark
and then the light to know the way
tune the radio
fizz
and little bit of silence
and then the new britney
and the blood and the dark and the silence
go away
out to play
in the back of your mind
where you put the mean words
bully boy brown
with a chest of toys
hacksaw, bitch
what happened to the quarter and the light and to britney?
they go to ice cream and to your bedroom and to hell
but the blood and the dark and the silence...
hover
and there's a chasm
full of blood and dark and silence
and the hacksaw, bitch
the toychest is full
of hand made crafts
come out to play?

[RiddleMeWonders]

Hey. would you like to know just how much of a dorky white girl I am?
As I was reading what you called too emo, I was rapping it; It sucked. My rapping, not your writing. See, there. It's okay to go over the top with your feelings when you write. It's like opening the window a litle bit more. I love your writing. But I shouldn't have to tell you that every time I read something you write, you should know. I'm saying this for future reference.

I liked the mysterious rhythm it had... Inconsistant in pattern, but at the same time, like diagnosing a wound in a method.
I sound like an idiot in my reply, I know, but if only I could find the right "write" words I could make it easier to understand what I'm saying. Oh well. I guess "I like it" will just have to do.