A Death, Not Mine Alone, Poem |
 Mar 8 2005, 05:53 PM
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 Crying Behind Blind Eyes  Group: Member Posts: 257 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,967  |
A Death, Not Mine Alone
By: Savannah Harrison The phone's ringing such bitter tones, But I can't answer it, Because it's to far out of reach, And you'll hang up at last, Thinking no one was home... So maybe, no one ever was. I'm drowning in tidal waves of sorrow, In tears that aren't my own, Perhaps this tragedy was yours, Perhaps it built up inside you for to long, And I'm sorry I didn't ever ask you, Why you never once cried when I went away. I can't say I'm sorry, You and I both know that it's to late, We avoided confrontation, And our seperate declarations, Never once sparked realization, Regretfully still, an apology has yet to grace my lips. I know that you're upset, I know that when you sleep you cry, But have you taken a moment to ask yourself yet... How your words might have wounded me, How I might be dying, Or in this case drowning in our, not just my, grief. I'm laying in the bath tub, What a way to forget you, With the water far above my mouth...my nose... With the water to far above to ever breathe again, My clothes are on, and the water's dirty, From the filth that my day has brought upon me. This will never end, I'm sorry that I hurt you, But you hurt me too, And the phone will go on forever, And I'll die with your final ring, Or else...the operator will give you my last goodbye. |
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Mar 10 2005, 06:48 PM
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Crying Behind Blind Eyes Group: Member Posts: 257 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,967 |
I was wondering...would anyone like to see a sequel to this poem, maybe from the guy's point of view? Because this is meant to be from the girl's point of view. Thinking back on their relationship, as she drowns herself, and faintly hears the phone call that never came when she needed it going on and on from the next room.
So, I thought I could do what the guy's thinking as he calls her. |
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Apr 11 2005, 09:19 PM
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Brie Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,172 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,548 |
QUOTE(Sa-Chan @ Mar 10 2005, 7:48 PM) I was wondering...would anyone like to see a sequel to this poem, maybe from the guy's point of view? Because this is meant to be from the girl's point of view. Thinking back on their relationship, as she drowns herself, and faintly hears the phone call that never came when she needed it going on and on from the next room. So, I thought I could do what the guy's thinking as he calls her.  Yes, I'd love to read that. This one was wonderful. I love the words you chose. Very descriptive, very smart. Lovely job. |
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Sa-Chan A Death, Not Mine Alone Mar 8 2005, 05:53 PM
stephinika i loved it. great perspective and well written. gr... Mar 11 2005, 02:36 AM CRAZEDindian40 I think it's an awesome poem, you definitely h... Mar 18 2005, 09:12 PM azn.peace.maker its awesome but then you didnt write it.. i would ... Mar 18 2005, 09:14 PM Sa-Chan Eh...but...I did write it. Maybe I should start pu... Mar 18 2005, 09:44 PM M1SSxCHR1SSY It's really good. I think that you should add ... Mar 19 2005, 01:55 AM
x3__iGiVEup Put a sequel. I would love to read it =) Apr 10 2005, 09:10 PM |
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