good rap i made up, no racism, not stupid, and not copied. Options

[*Statistik*]

yo
your too wack to compete
your damn lyrics aint even complete
my rap game is neat
so go ahead and take a seat
watch my show
y'all gonna feel me when i feel da flow
dont make my minds blow
im here to bring hip-hop
bigger than fat joe
your spits are so slow
that make me say whoa
your not in my league, your way too below
your career is 100% trash
my raps are probably quicker than the runnin of steve nash
do i make my self clear?
dont make me get too high for you, queer
this is my year
some people hatin on me
cuz my raps include racism
and dont worry
this will be no more plagiarism
this is the end of all
go ahead sent this to yo friend
dont piss me off again or ill start a brawl
worse than the pacers and ron artest
i hope you dont get too stressed, god ill be blessed

[yummy_delight]

as previously stated. NO FLOW.

i think it's terrible. too many similes/metaphors/allusions, not enough structure and your word choice isn't that intelligent. it looks like you're trying to be witty and make people go "OOOOOO HE GOT SUUUURVED!!!!" but it's just not working.

try writing some normal poetry first. then say it out loud. maybe then you'll get the idea that rhyming lines doesn't constitute work that flows easily.