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 Mar 20 2005, 11:48 AM
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 Another ditch in the road... you keep moving  Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152  |
the leaves of the trees
glimmer for you for me for us the waves of the sea crash for you for me for us the light of the fire flikkers for you for me for us. the wings of the angels beat for you for me for us and i see imperfection and i couldnt change a thing and i hear sweet discord and i wouldnt write a melody and i feel chaos and i never want the calm |
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Mar 25 2005, 09:47 PM
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 I'd rather make mistakes than break. Group: Member Posts: 121 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 117,869 |
Wow, that was really deep. I liked it a lot, especially the ending.
"and i see imperfection and i couldnt change a thing and i hear sweet discord and i wouldnt write a melody" That, to me, was the best part of it. There was a slight rhyme, and it has its own underlying meaning. |
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racoons > you poem Mar 20 2005, 11:48 AM
ItzOnlySydney wow. ur so poetic. i bet whoever you wrote it abou... Mar 22 2005, 12:31 AM racoons > you ^^
eh, its not written for anyone in particular, ... Mar 22 2005, 12:12 PM
Frankie QUOTE(MarchHare2UrAlice @ Mar 22 2005, 11:12 ... Mar 22 2005, 06:55 PM lolita kitty dude, you should like TOTALLY turn that into a rap... Mar 22 2005, 12:39 PM smthngcrprategrl34 that's really good! very prettyful Mar 22 2005, 06:03 PM KissMe2408 Good job james :) Very unique, you always start of... Mar 25 2005, 12:44 AM xXMomoBubbleTeaXx I love the whole poem...it's beautiful..I like... Mar 25 2005, 03:12 PM william i like the ending. Mar 25 2005, 09:37 PM yukichan nice poem!good job.. Mar 25 2005, 09:46 PM f0b_un1t wow, i like it :] Mar 25 2005, 09:48 PM nightmare4taki NICE POEM! Mar 25 2005, 10:04 PM xd0rkette I like it !
Very nice. Mar 25 2005, 10:06 PM Rachel is love i like the end =) pretty james Mar 27 2005, 10:07 PM stephinika i quite like the end too...very nicely done as usu... Mar 27 2005, 11:17 PM `SWTWiNKLE3YES nice pattern :] it`s very nice. Mar 28 2005, 12:40 AM |
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