A poem by me, is it good? no its not rap |
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 Mar 21 2005, 06:55 PM
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The sun is still shinin
i miss you even though my heart is broken remember the door is still open my tears are soakin cuz after my words are spoken your eyes will be woken and then the love will be forever... and ever.. ill be there for you whenever wherever.. awesome? good? bad? terrible? 
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Mar 22 2005, 02:44 AM
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I agree, it is better than "your" raps. But I do have to say I think there is a bit too much rhyming going on just for the sake of rhyming.
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Mar 22 2005, 07:29 PM
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 Can't have the hand without the cock. Group: Member Posts: 2,481 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 50,622 |
QUOTE(M1SSxCHR1SSY @ Mar 21 2005, 9:44 PM) I agree, it is better than "your" raps. But I do have to say I think there is a bit too much rhyming going on just for the sake of rhyming.  agreed. IMO, i think it's best if you stick to this. |
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Mar 24 2005, 03:14 PM
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 t3h koolest guy in cB Group: Member Posts: 2,194 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 513 |
QUOTE(jambaJUICE @ Mar 22 2005, 7:29 PM) agreed. IMO, i think it's best if you stick to this.[/font] lol i agree. hahaha... 
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Statistik A poem by me Mar 21 2005, 06:55 PM
yukichan uhh i think its alrite...not bad... Mar 21 2005, 07:08 PM salcha haha better than your raps.
but yeah, it's oka... Mar 22 2005, 02:15 AM
xXirockhardXx Lol i agree too. you should stick to poems not rap... Mar 22 2005, 09:03 PM dispn0ygonekrazy hey doode i aint ginnah diss u but good ur poems a... Mar 22 2005, 09:33 PM lolita kitty pretty good, honestly.
lets just hope this one was... Mar 23 2005, 04:51 AM Siddonne its ok,
now the problem is will it get turned int... Mar 23 2005, 04:55 AM wind&fire im not being prejeduce buti dont like it Mar 23 2005, 04:52 PM sikdragon you need work, you should stick to your raps. Mar 23 2005, 05:04 PM jnukes rap IS poetry ..
hah, that be so funny if he st... Mar 23 2005, 05:11 PM sikdragon yeah but you dont call a sonnet, free verse. there... Mar 24 2005, 12:00 AM Angel_Cece thank god it wasnt a rap Mar 24 2005, 03:17 PM nightmare4taki He probaly copied it from somewhere else. I don... Mar 24 2005, 03:34 PM KissMe2408 Whoa, hold the phone. Jason didn't write a rap... Mar 25 2005, 12:31 AM xXMomoBubbleTeaXx This is the first poem I actually understood...and... Mar 25 2005, 03:25 PM william better than your raps, but the last three lines on... Mar 25 2005, 09:39 PM sheepy i like it Mar 25 2005, 09:39 PM
x3__iGiVEup i dont get it Apr 10 2005, 05:34 PM |
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