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 Mar 16 2005, 10:00 AM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer*  Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134  |
dayuuuum havent post in here in hella damn long lol anyways heres a poem
i sit here alone endruing so much pain all the words you've thrown at me i just cant explain ive made mistakes ive told my share of lies every move and word i said just makes you cry forever never lasted, vanished right before me flew farther away as it came towards the sea i live everyday to see a smile on your face the one that lightens my day where everything seems misplaced i want to hold in my arms and kiss your lips goodnight i wanna be the one telling you everythings alright all i have is nothing but pain in my heart ever since that day you left and torn me apart wishing on the stars way up in the sky i wish to love untill the day i die |
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Mar 17 2005, 03:57 PM
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I agree with Steph in regards to spelling and grammar, but I feel an apologetic vibe coming from this poem, and maybe even a tinge of regret. I really like it. You sound so sincere. Good job.
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dispn0ygonekrazy (untitled) Mar 16 2005, 10:00 AM
stephinika not bad, some spelling errors but otherwise it flo... Mar 16 2005, 02:53 PM Teesa how lovely..and romantic. Mar 17 2005, 01:02 AM dispn0ygonekrazy thnx =] Mar 17 2005, 12:39 PM ibleedforvanilla woa. that poem kinda relates to my life. Nice job... Mar 17 2005, 01:46 PM
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