finis, vague yet so very not. |
finis, vague yet so very not. |
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Mar 13 2005, 06:38 PM
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a little something written today...not my best i don't think but i kinda like it. constructive criticism is appreciated, thank you.
Finis Slowly dying within A knife constantly twisting Deeper and deeper Writhing inside Nothing But brief instants of comfort are found And nowhere else But from the obvious and forbidden Except the two unconsciously Grow nearer and nearer The defining line slowly becoming Nothing but thin wire Constantly on the brink of breaking In fear yet in hope Of the two joining as one As to not be continually yearning For one or the other With a pitiful attempt to push the latter Heartbreakingly farther away Conflicts and battles as such Quickly add to the endless expanse of pain Already there and simply waiting to accumulate As each plight, each struggle Piles on top of each other Any happiness abound Is a mere rush of euphoria And once the high comes crashing back down Nothing is left But blank remnants Of what used to be. |
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Mar 15 2005, 04:22 PM
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![]() highfive. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 1,301 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 32,951 |
i love all your poems! ^ I agree! Steph is the by far the best writer in cB.
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stephinika finis Mar 13 2005, 06:38 PM
MyVermilionPlague Aw, I like it a lot!
Nice job, Steph.
My favor... Mar 13 2005, 07:23 PM
M1SSxCHR1SSY I love your writing Steph. It's always amazing... Mar 13 2005, 11:04 PM
islandgirl4eva You're so descriptive Steph! The way you u... Mar 14 2005, 11:04 PM
stephinika thanks guys. that means a lot. Mar 15 2005, 01:14 AM
racoons > you it is awesome. u'r probably the best writer on... Mar 15 2005, 12:25 PM
stephinika QUOTE(MarchHare2UrAlice @ Mar 15 2005, 9:25 A... Mar 15 2005, 11:43 PM
DaToNeViEtBoI916 that would be great to say aloud =] Mar 15 2005, 06:29 PM
kyuubi319 its gorgeous. very descriptive. i love it. Mar 15 2005, 08:42 PM![]() ![]() |