poem, what do u think |
 Mar 11 2005, 09:47 PM
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hm one of my firends wrote this i think its amazing shes 13 one of my best friends tell me wut u think bout it
World of Pretend For the people who can no longer handle reality Let me stay In my world of pretend Where nothing is broken There's nothing to mend Don't bring me back To your reality Don't make me face The cruelty of life Let me stay In my dreams Where I can't hear My own silent screams Leave me here In my haven Where I seek What was taken Let me stay In my world of pretend Sayrah Elizabeth Gilbert Copyright ©2005 Sayrah Elizabeth Gilbert  very talented i think shes workin on a book right now to shes also gettin another poem published.
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Mar 11 2005, 10:29 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
I like the concept. But the rhyming is kind of weird because she doesn't really have a specific pattern so the flow isn't so good. I like it though and I can relate. Good luck to her.
PS. You can see some of my own poems in the writing section. Like everyone else said, you'll get more people to post if you post there. It's specifically for writing. How convenient is that? 
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illfadedsoldier poem Mar 11 2005, 09:47 PM
sadolakced acid sounds good.
there is a writing section you kno... Mar 11 2005, 09:49 PM
EmmalieV QUOTE(sadolakced acid @ Mar 11 2005, 10:49 PM... Mar 11 2005, 10:48 PM Azarel ^ What Justin said.
Should be in writing.
http://w... Mar 11 2005, 09:49 PM salcha this should be in writing.
but great poem, im not ... Mar 11 2005, 09:50 PM illfadedsoldier well how am i supposed to move it is there a way i... Mar 11 2005, 09:51 PM --x who0ps you cant move it, one of the staff people will.
j... Mar 11 2005, 09:54 PM dahding someone will move this eventually. please, post in... Mar 11 2005, 10:00 PM illfadedsoldier lol thats pretty cool well i looked for sumwhere t... Mar 11 2005, 10:05 PM cocoalightning27 Some staff member better move this to writing.. Mar 11 2005, 10:08 PM korbana05 aww i like it... thats how I feel myself at times,... Mar 11 2005, 10:09 PM xbr0kensmil3 it's really nice. i like it. Mar 11 2005, 10:42 PM yuna* fab. I like it a lot. =] Mar 11 2005, 10:45 PM illfadedsoldier not to be rude but for the like 7th time...yes i k... Mar 11 2005, 11:15 PM rOckThISshYt I think it's really really good.
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