president of the united states Options

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can you guys proof read this for me? and check my grammer and give suggestions? thank you so much

Picture a man that grew up mentally challenged, standing before us all and taking his oath of presidency. Despite his past, he no longer stumbles along his words, nor see with hollow eyes. Although he may not be the wisest man alive nor is he the most politically, he has something that a lot of us are missing. He may not be the cliche choice for being the President of the United States, but I think Charlie in “Flowers for Algernon” deserves the role. Can you imagine?
In “Flowers for Algernon” by Daniel Keyes, Charlie at the age of thirty-two, been mentally retarded all his life until a team of scientists decided to use him to go through a surgery that may boost his intelligence, and it was very successful. You may think that this is artificial intelligence that he is not truly wise enough to become the President but not mattering that he worked all his life and slowly developed his brain or he merely got it from an operation, he has something that he holds tightly on to that is yet to be filled in us.
Determination is stuck on him, and he is not afraid. Not only that but he is friendly and trustworthy; he faces his fears so bravely, and the thought of giving up never flashed in his mind. Being ‘different’ for about half his life, does not change his perspectives. He knew that the surgery was dangerous and not a promise that it would work, but he goes on with it anyways. He is eager to learn, and to have knowledge. Due to his past, he also learns to strive on, and when he finally gets what he waited his whole life for, he doesn’t let it slip away. Knowledge, we have it, we have it and take it for granted. As the story develops, we can sense his growth and bit by bit he becomes the great man that would not tolerate, that falls down but gets up once again, the man that believes in himself.
You may disagree with me, but how beneficially is a president that is so full of political behaviors yet blinded from other’s feelings like on how we feel when we have to go into war? How great is a president where they speak with their tongues, yet do not accomplish their words with their hands? Charlie, although ‘unusual’, is very unique and maybe, just maybe his differences may just make the big change in all of us. Someday we’ll be able to overlook our dissimilarities and realize how beautiful each and every one of us is. Maybe even see that, in the long run, we aren’t so different at all.

[*Azarel*]

Picture a man that grew up mentally challenged, standing before us all and taking his oath of presidency. Despite his past, he no longer stumbles along his words, nor sees with hollow eyes. Although he may not be the wisest man alive nor is he the most politically, he has something that a lot of us (<- I was taught not to use personal pronouns in essays.. so that irks me.) are missing. He may not be the cliche (<- awkward word choice) choice for being the president of the United States, but I think Charlie of from “Flowers for Algernon” (Is that a novel? If so, it should underlined. Short stories and poems are in quotations as is.) deserves the role. Can you imagine?

In “Flowers for Algernon,” by Daniel Keyes, Charlie, at the age of thirty-two, has been mentally retarded all his life until a team of scientists decided to use him (You don't really "use" someone in a surgery.. Word choice is awkward) to undergo go through a surgery that might have bosted may boost his intelligence, and it was very successful (unneccessary, to some degree..  You may think that this is artificial intelligence, that he is not truly wise enough to become the president. but not mattering that Regardless of how he obtained his knowledge and wisdom, [color=red]either worked all his life and slowly developed his brain or he merely (Word choice..?)got it from an operation, Charlie has something that he holds tightly on to that is yet to be filled in us.<- ambiguous/vague

Determination is stuck on him, and he is not afraid. <- Parallelism. "He is both determined and unafraid. Not only that, but he is friendly and trustworthy; he faces his fears so bravely, and the thought of giving up never flashesd in his mind. Being ‘different’ for about half his life , does not change his perspectives. He knew that the surgery was dangerous and not guaranteed to work a promise that it would work, but he took the chance goes on with it anyways. He is eager to learn, and to have knowledge. Due to his past, he also learns to strive on (< idiomatically incorrect. Strive for what?), and when he finally gets what he waited his whole life for, he doesn’t let it slip away. Knowledge, we have it, we have it and take it for granted. (<doesn't flow with the rest of the paragraph) As the story develops, we can sense his growth, and bit by bit, he becomes the great man that would not tolerate (would not tolerate what?), that falls down but gets up once again, the man that believes in himself. (parallelism)

You (second person also irks me..) may disagree with me (same goes for first person.), but how beneficially is a president that is so full of political behaviors, yet blinded from others' feelings like on how we feel when we have to go into war (unneccessary)? How great is a president who speaks with his mouth where they speak with their tongues, yet does not enforce his words with his actionsnot accomplish their words with their hands? Charlie, although ‘unusual’, is very unique, and maybe, just maybe, his differences may justmake the big change in all of us. Someday, we’ll be able to overlook our differences dissimilarities and realize how beautiful each and every one of us is. Maybe even see that, in the long run, we aren’t so different at all.< fragment

^ Edits in red.

Your paragraphs are a bit choppy and grammatically incorrect. I took the liberty of rewording your second paragraph (below).

-> In “Flowers for Algernon," Daniel Keyes writes of thirty-two-year-old Charlie, a mentally retarded individual. In the short story, a team of scientists decides to operate on Charlie in order to boost his intelligence. Many may think that the artificial intelligence Charlie gained through his operation may mean that he is not wise enough to be the American president, but regardless of how he obtained his knowledge, Charlie fiercely clings to something that everyone hopes to find.

Um. I don't know what you want to say.