a disenchanting scene |
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 Mar 1 2005, 04:10 PM
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through my mind's eye
i do spy some gossipy girl fingers twisting their curls chatting away at people's follies from today through my mind's eye i do spy a group of vapid boys playing with their toys ruining some girl's name like it's nothing but a game through my mind's eye i do spy a student in the back feasting on a verbal snack she looks upon the scene looking sad, disgusted, mean through my mind's eye i do spy a girl with a pen an open mind and then i write what i see making pretty poetry |
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Mar 8 2005, 04:01 AM
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 Yawn  Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
QUOTE(islandgirl4eva @ Mar 1 2005, 4:10 PM) through my mind's eye i do spy a group of vapid boys playing with their toys ruining some girl's name like it's nothing but a game  I loved it! that part especially^ You have got talent, I really liked how you traced the poem back to yourself at the end. |
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islandgirl4eva a disenchanting scene Mar 1 2005, 04:10 PM
racoons > you SO good... i love th esecond verse Mar 1 2005, 05:12 PM Teesa I loved that..especially that last verse. very nic... Mar 1 2005, 06:39 PM stephinika wow...i love the pattern/style you wrote it...flow... Mar 1 2005, 07:56 PM korbana05 hey!
wow i really like that... i can relate. ... Mar 2 2005, 12:23 AM islandgirl4eva Yeah, thanks. I tend to be very quiet in class. I... Mar 2 2005, 08:04 PM --{Empty}-- I like the whole idea of drawing out the entire sc... Mar 2 2005, 11:36 PM salcha like what stephinika said, i love the pattern
the ... Mar 4 2005, 03:29 AM Outloved I like this poem a lot. I like how you repeat the ... Mar 4 2005, 08:14 PM njgurl412 awsome poem Mar 4 2005, 09:02 PM MyVermilionPlague Great job, Naomi!
It flowed very well and it ... Mar 8 2005, 02:30 AM
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