amidst, omg...i wrote something. |
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 Mar 4 2005, 02:29 AM
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its been quite a long time...its amazing really. written on the spur of the moment. constructive criticism is appreciated.
Amidst She’s lost now Her mind all lost in the frenzy Emotions spinning through her head She does not know her own thoughts Her own decisions don’t feel her own Amidst all her thoughts A single voice rings out Telling her the truth But thoroughly shrouded Behind the ongoing whirlwind Her threshold of insanity Ever so slowly creeping closer Again a single voice calls out Tiptoeing past the dysfunctional sentiments Trying to reach her very core Almost there Looming so intimately But in an instance Is torn away by the uncertainties Still spinning Always So close Yet so very far She begins to spin dizzily More and more Inside herself Hiding herself In the confines of her own mind Her own thoughts Confusion And tears. |
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Mar 8 2005, 02:28 AM
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Brie  Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,172 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,548 |
QUOTE wow, it's so intense and emotional at the same time, i love it. niiice. QUOTE My favorite section. This I believe is the first thing I have ever read that was written by you. I don't know why I haven't seen more of your talent, but now I am strengthened and confirmed in my assumption that you are an awesome writer. Great job, Steph. *Nods* Really great. ^ Agreed to both comments. Very nice job, Steph! Very emotional. Keep up the good work. :D |
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stephinika amidst Mar 4 2005, 02:29 AM
salcha wow, it's so intense and emotional at the same... Mar 4 2005, 03:19 AM --{Empty}-- Pfft, and you say you can't write. This is GRE... Mar 6 2005, 04:54 AM RiddleMeWonders QUOTE(stephinika @ Mar 4 2005, 2:29 AM)its be... Mar 7 2005, 03:54 PM Paradox of Life Wow, I'm glad you decided to write because you... Mar 7 2005, 07:39 PM stephinika thanks for the great comments guys. and to akaryu... Mar 7 2005, 08:38 PM racoons > you steph, thats incredible. it sth ebest think ive re... Mar 8 2005, 06:06 PM Sa-Chan I like this a lot...deep, and just downright strik... Mar 8 2005, 06:10 PM
stephinika thanks so much guys. i appreciate the comments. Mar 8 2005, 07:12 PM |
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