Joyful Nightmares, poem |
 Mar 6 2005, 09:55 PM
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God send me twisted dreams
of bloody picnic scenes. Send me visions of angels who've lost their wings and demons in playground swings. Grant me my demented gaurdians of the night. Through joyful nightmares grant me flight... After months of writer's block, this felt good to write. Sweet dreams... |
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Mar 7 2005, 07:45 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
I love it. It's dark, evil and almost humorous. It's probably my favorite that I've read so far. It's really short and simple (I hate long draggy poems) and to the point as Steph said. I really like it! I love the rhyming. Usually I'm really skeptical when it comes to rhyming, but you've done it really well. I like the
QUOTE Send me visions of angels who've lost their wings and demons in playground swings. line. It's cleverly put together. Keep up the good work. |
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[Mediocre]Artist Joyful Nightmares Mar 6 2005, 09:55 PM
stephinika short, to the point...it rhymes in a good way. i l... Mar 6 2005, 09:58 PM MyVermilionPlague ^ Agreed. :D
Very nice!
It got to the point ... Mar 8 2005, 02:29 AM thatgirlmarcy ya that poem was really good and instead of puttin... Mar 9 2005, 09:12 PM
xd0rkette i like it. it's short.. but it rhymes and has ... Mar 9 2005, 09:39 PM [Mediocre]Artist QUOTE(xd0rkette @ Mar 9 2005, 8:39 PM)i like ... Mar 10 2005, 09:51 PM |
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