a touch., written in class once again. |
a touch., written in class once again. |
| *stephinika* |
Mar 6 2005, 05:51 PM
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nothing special...written again in class, right after 'i don't know' actually...meh. constructive criticism is appreciated, thanks.
A touch. Eyes burning deep Fiery intensity nowhere else but within their vision For nothing more can be shown But subtly each manages to be fulfilled By the slightest instances For each takes and indulges all that one can His featherlike touch on the small of her back Breaks the emptiness between the two’s physical Though their souls have come together Long previous to that In such a way Hidden from prying curiosities The smallest smirk creeps upon his features As she gleams of a secret happiness A single step is taken And she now sees him face to face Gently, his fingers travel her arm His hand cups her face, so carefully He takes just one more step Noses so close, almost brushing A bittersweet smile reaches her lips As he pulls her close They clasp together tightly Trying to ignore the feeling of how they fit together Ever so perfectly And as they pull away, Each immediately feels the loss And her eyes reveal the once more present emptiness Every time she leaves his presence Walking away, he peers over his shoulder Ever so longingly Their feelings remaining hidden away Deep within the chambers of their hearts. |
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Nicolatofu dang steph, your writings are great! I love th... Mar 6 2005, 07:34 PM
--{Empty}-- Ewwww, they touched each other, COOTIES!!... Mar 6 2005, 09:53 PM
RiddleMeWonders Magnificent.
I'll add more later, the bells ju... Mar 7 2005, 04:41 PM
Zer_Wil_De_Mach thats great...so emo i can feel the wrath of the l... Mar 21 2005, 12:15 AM
MyVermilionPlague Oh my God, that is wonderful!
Great job, Steph... Mar 21 2005, 12:53 AM
islandgirl4eva Awww, Steph! Absolutely, positively fabulous... Mar 21 2005, 07:02 AM
yukichan wow..that was good...good job.. Mar 21 2005, 07:13 PM
salcha very deep,
i like your style of writing, nice job... Mar 22 2005, 03:02 AM
ItzOnlySydney *claps hands* nice poem steph! Mar 23 2005, 07:49 PM![]() ![]() |