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Trapped, Critique please!
Paradox of Life
post Mar 5 2005, 10:18 PM
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I've been doing a lot of critique-ing myself (not neccessarily on createblog) and I think I deserve some brutal honesty. I wrote this poem a few days ago. A whirlpool of my darkness on paper.

Trapped

Inescapable darkness,

Repeated failures,

Constant miseries,

It's so dark.

The world,

Cast shadows,

On me,

I can't find the light.
 

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Paradox of Life   Trapped   Mar 5 2005, 10:18 PM
stephinika   simple, yet good. nice job.   Mar 6 2005, 01:16 AM
--{Empty}--   Not bad at all, I personally found this piece a bi...   Mar 6 2005, 04:44 AM


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