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 Feb 24 2005, 03:44 PM
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 i've never wanted anything rationale.  Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,449 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,045  |
this is an older poem as well. i tried a different style. i don't really like it that much. it doesn't really relate much to me
 Moments are many things They are: wonderful, life changing, dramatic, shocking, breathtaking, and sometimes great. But some moments ones such as this, they are hard to accept, are tough to get through, and feel as though they last for eternity. When really it’s over in just a few seconds. Just a few seconds and anything could happen. Everything I wanted and loved was taken from me. Why moments like these are happening to me, I don’t know why. Why you are gone in just one moment I cannot, will not ever understand. |
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Mar 1 2005, 01:14 AM
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I find this one changes scene/circumstance too quickly, flow isn't too bad though. But no matter, as long as you know what you like and don't like, is all that really matters in the end anyways
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Rachel is love Moments Feb 24 2005, 03:44 PM
racoons > you eh... its ok...
its a little too narratative for ... Feb 24 2005, 03:47 PM Rachel is love yeah i dont really like this one either. its just.... Feb 24 2005, 03:52 PM racoons > you ^^
i know what you mean... its not bad, its just ... Feb 24 2005, 03:58 PM cynicalstitch Well. It sounds alot like a monolouge if anything ... Feb 24 2005, 08:46 PM nz... itz ok...but it didn't touch my heart...poem r... Feb 25 2005, 06:07 AM stephinika i like it...i don't know, theres something abo... Feb 28 2005, 02:54 PM rOckThISshYt I think it's okay. I've always believe tha... Mar 1 2005, 12:03 AM
Programmer love the flow on it. Mar 1 2005, 04:50 AM |
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