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 Feb 25 2005, 10:41 PM
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 Handclaps please  Group: Member Posts: 503 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 26,359  |
This is something that I did randomly one day. It is OK..I guess
Futures I sometimes walk looking at my feet. Avoiding people’s eyes. Heading straight forward, Never looking back into the darkness. I often wish I could change the past. The past that made me give up what I loved the most. The past that made me be this sad person. Sneaking outside just for a moment to myself. This future, a future that seems to be fixed on the burdens I bear. Heavy weight I cannot seem to shake. Things must change. I walk faster and my head is up. They show me their smiling faces, but all I see is their eyes. Their eyes which judge me. Every time I turn around for a moment. I have never felt so alone. Alienated from the world and it’s worries. Staring out the window, I finally see the light. The little bright light in the corner The only thing I see. |
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Mar 1 2005, 12:50 AM
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I like the change of pace. Usually I don't really because more often than not its not pulled off very well, but somehow this one seems to flow well into each other. Good job, keep it up ^_^
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rockstermonkey Futures Feb 25 2005, 10:41 PM
stephinika nice. i like the way its written. good job. Feb 27 2005, 08:36 PM monde libre meh, poetry is not my area of expertise at all, bu... Feb 28 2005, 10:04 AM rOckThISshYt Great job. It goes from sad to happy smoothly and ... Mar 1 2005, 12:13 AM
Programmer very nice indeed. pace is unpredictable..i like it... Mar 1 2005, 04:53 AM |
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