The Feeling, hope you guys like it |
 Feb 24 2005, 10:27 PM
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yea...here's my second poem on cb...so yea:
I take a deep breath, Hold the shiny object Inbetween my fingers. A tear travels down my cheek And falls... As I take another deep breath, A drop falls from my wrist to the ground. My emotions escaped me, I felt nothing..... Stress overpowered me, I had sleepless nights, I couldn't conentrate, My life was falling apart. And now, Cutting overpowered me. I got such a high from it. I became addicted to it. As I watched the blood trickle down my wrist, I forgot about the pain I had inside. Everynight, The cuts got deeper, And deeper, And deeper. For the last time, I just sat there. I actually felt it. The vein kept spitting out blood. I actually felt it. I lay down in a pool of blood, The color no painter can mix. And drifted off into a dreamless sleep. yea...i used to cut, but then i stopped...so yea...sorry it was so long 
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Mar 1 2005, 12:47 AM
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Like your choice of words. Depict the situation very well. A thuroughly (don't mind the spelling) enjoyed piece
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Led-Zeppelin Lover The Feeling Feb 24 2005, 10:27 PM
c0oki3_m0n$tah wow..sorta scary but really cool! Feb 25 2005, 01:08 AM nz... de words r beautiful...but it also gave me a creep... Feb 25 2005, 05:52 AM Nicolatofu wow, that gave me chills, and it makes my wrists h... Feb 27 2005, 08:37 PM stephinika yeah that was rather...chilling. but well written. Feb 28 2005, 03:17 PM smthngcrprategrl34 well written. you used good words to express the e... Feb 28 2005, 05:12 PM rOckThISshYt I think that's pretty damn good.
I'm gla... Mar 1 2005, 12:09 AM
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