Death Day, Poem |
 Feb 24 2005, 01:03 AM
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 Entropic  Group: Member Posts: 216 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,522  |
This is for my dad
 Constructive critism please Happy Death Day I miss you, sometimes too much To hug you, would be a gift-like gods touch My tears, are full of selfishness My fears, are nothing but memories missed Taken from my curling hand. Clutched so tight-like making glass from sand. Please know I am okay and I know i'll see you one day Know that I love you, and I will come what may, Till I see you again, Happy Death Day. -Tainted_Faerie '05 R.I.P 2/24/85 |
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Feb 24 2005, 08:41 PM
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Member Group: Member Posts: 18 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 103,746 |
I never really lost a loved one to death...I shouldn't say this..
but sometimes I wish my dad was dead...Not because I feel he deserves it, he's just so overwhelming and it isn't his fault.. It is a sweet poem, and I do agree with KillDrake, but likewise. The thought always counts... |
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tainted_faerie Death Day Feb 24 2005, 01:03 AM
Programmer awww...i feel you...i miss my dad to..... Feb 24 2005, 05:30 AM Kill_Drake the rhyming seems a bit awkward, maybe you should ... Feb 24 2005, 01:54 PM
RiddleMeWonders QUOTE(Kill_Drake @ Feb 24 2005, 1:54 PM)the r... Feb 24 2005, 03:27 PM
tainted_faerie QUOTE(Kill_Drake @ Feb 24 2005, 1:54 PM)the r... Feb 24 2005, 06:01 PM angel-roh Wow that's sucha touching poem.
I bet your da... Feb 24 2005, 02:58 PM c0oki3_m0n$tah i love that poem! so touching! Feb 24 2005, 10:21 PM stephinika hmm...i love the concept, very touching. Feb 24 2005, 10:23 PM |
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