rain on valentine's day Options

[ryfitaDF]

RAIN ON VALENTINE’S DAY
This deck of cards has been stacked against us
With all the hearts removed
Just spades for your use to dig into my flesh
Inject me with sorrow, encase me in pain
The vultures circle me as we speak
The sky darkens above
The storm is born as our heaven weeps
The rain falls on this Valentine’s Day

We’ve cried each other enough rivers
To widen this canyon tenfold
Our every dream
Beckoned by the grave

Forced smiles are all that I can muster anymore
As plastic as the tube the plasma runs through
The euphoria I once saw
Became a disaster in the making
Our hypnotic remembrance
The duress of our memories
Put our ashes in a heart-shaped urn
The rain falls on this Valentine’s Day

We’ve cried eachother enough rivers
To form this dreary sea
Spread across our globe of sentiments
Most of which we dare not chart
I grow weary of staying here
In this state of confusion
I’ll miss you
You c**t

[Sa-Chan]

This was beautiful...I was to the point of tears. It touched me, it hurt me on some deeper level. Maybe because it describes how I feel...how my Valentine's Day was. Maybe because it just plucked a string on my emotional guitar...but then it was ruined with the last line.

You're a beautiful poet, and a beautiful song writer. You touch people. I don't know you, but I respect you, and I'd love to be your friend, but this piece was so beautiful...and....sad.

But then the line

I'll miss you, You c**t.

Pissed me off.

It just seemed like such an angry ending to something so graceful. It's like watching ballet and then in the last part, the ballerina starts beating her partner over the head with a metal baseball bat.

It just broke the mood. It just destroyed the emotion. I love this. I think you're a great writer. But I'm just gonna pretend that the last line of this poem didn't exist. Just because...the anger kind of....destroys it. Maybe I'm not making sense?

Please, no one be mad at me. I'm not saying you're not a great writer. You should personally know that I look up to you, that I worship your writing skills. That just...I mean, my heart ached when I read this...and then it froze, and went cold. If that makes any sense.