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 Aug 26 2005, 07:27 PM
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 speechless  Group: Member Posts: 869 Joined: Jul 2005 Member No: 163,564  |
my heart is broken
i try to fix it but nothings working i buy a new one it doesnt fit i try again countless times i have failed i want you to see can you see the best thing in front of you which is me ive mend my heart i sewed it up 13 stitches it hurts so much 6 weeks pass my heart has healed i guess i was blind cause now its clear i need you to see please can you see the greatest thing right in front of you which was me |
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Aug 28 2005, 12:09 AM
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 I'll never be who I was again.. Group: Member Posts: 2,886 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 77,981 |
i like it..it has good rhythim(sp?)..
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Aug 28 2005, 07:09 PM
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 Bay Area YadadaDiiiig. Group: Official Member Posts: 4,249 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 103,202 |
^ agreed. it was like a pausing flow.
at least thats how i read it. |
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Aug 31 2005, 12:21 PM
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 Ms. I Can't Tell Pants From Math Group: Member Posts: 371 Joined: Aug 2005 Member No: 191,034 |
Haha, agreed w/ both of them. It read very smooth.
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Aug 31 2005, 01:55 PM
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 WarPath Leader. Group: Member Posts: 668 Joined: Aug 2005 Member No: 216,721 |
smooth and nice :)
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