Tainted Angel Options

[akjsd]

you look at her, and what do you see ?
you see a girl as perfect as broken can be .
glance at her features, and you'll think that she's kind,
she's got the kind of smile you cant get out of your mind .
now listen to her voice, its as gentle as the air,
the way she chooses her words, it seems like she cares .
now look again, dont let her looks deceive you .
she's lost of track of the numbers that her heart's been lied to .
her eyes tell a story that ends with death,
and her life's marked by mistakes, those full of regret .
she's got those lips that are blood-stained with lust,
and she's got no real friends, because there's no one she can trust .
at first sight, she's a beauty, then you'll realize she's fake,
because she's a tainted angel, God's most beloved mistake .

[*RiC3xBoy*]

mmm...I like it, although you and untrue seems a bit dingy for me. Btw, your poem is the same name as Sarah's cB account.

[*liquidize*]

yeah to tell you the truth ..the only thing that lured me here was the " tainted angel " title...it reminded me of sarah :P

[Paradox of Life]

yeah to tell you the truth ..the only thing that lured me here was the " tainted angel " title...it reminded me of sarah :P

Same here. I personally didn't like this poem very much. It has a slightly childish and overdramatic choice of words. The only lines I liked are these:

'at first sight, she's a beauty, then you'll realize she's fake,
because she's a tainted angel, God's most beloved mistake .'

Hm. Cute poem, I suppose.

[*stephinika*]

^^
hm i have to agree with all the above statements actually... good effort though. keep up the good work.

[yukichan]

i like it..i can relate to it at some points..good job!