empty promises, in memory of the holocaust Options

[aznraver396]

you stand there
in the midst of the night
wondering if they'll ever care.
it breaks your heart
knowing reality
but you can't bear to be apart.
glancing into the sky,
straining to see
you wonder when it's your time to die.
diligently,
you pray
hoping that today just isn't your day.

a gunshot echoes through the camp
and you clutch onto anything you can
in hopes of finding something of comfort.
you were far too young for this
there's just too much to risk.
nowhere to run, nowhere to turn.
there's just nothing left to earn.

tears break your ego
while a stranger screams "you must go!"
you can't bare to move
for there was nothing to prove.
a flash before your eyes
now seems to be a promise in disguise.

[Paradox of Life]

Well written. It's very picturesque in your mind and you can invision the panic.

'tears break your ego
while a stranger screams "you must go!"

Bad flow. Ego and go don't rhyme.

Don't make half of your poem one rhyming scheme and half of it another. It sounds weird; just stick to one style and it'll flow a lot smoother.

1:
'you can't bare to move
for there was nothing to prove.'
2:
'you stand there
in the midst of the night
wondering if they'll ever care.'