Some stupidness I scribbled, Some postivie feedback, please. Options

[Donavin]

Help me god, I'm staring through crystal glass
reminicising on my short life, and why I have to last
too many people I've let down, too many people now lay dead
all the years of 'slanging gone to my head
What do we say to a family of someone who's offspring died as a teenager
I grow older, yet the world grows stranger
The sky shines clearly now, It no longer clouds my vision
I can now pinpoint my faults, with eagle like percisision
The sun shines through now, and no longer hides behind the clouds
Now everything is perfect
I have to capture this one moment of purity
Why should anyone go back to the pain and sufferening
when you can stay in a land of purity
the crystal glass still blocks the way
but I know that one day
the crystal glass will lift
and like a bird from it's cage I will fly
Even though my body, a mere vessell will be lifeless
My spirit and soul will continue to strive
No matter what we do we cann't quench a thirst of freedom
no man can actually repent
for what he has done
for once it has been done it has been marked down
in a book of history, forever haunting a mans past
so, for some the crystal glass might not open
and forever they lay trapped, like sands in a glass
air in a jar
None of us can be certain, so all must anticipate
what will happen to us, and our actions that decide our fate