About A Girl, poem |
 Jun 13 2005, 05:03 PM
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 vat ist dis?  Group: Member Posts: 142 Joined: Jun 2005 Member No: 152,500  |
She steps and spring springs from her step.
As soon as I saw her my heart lept. The most beautiful thing I'd ever saw, That type of beauty should be against the law. I'd seen girls before, but none like this, I just hope I don't get totally dissed. I stutter when I talk o her.  Eveyrone else just becomes a blure. Her hair flows like a dark brown sea, Her eyes so bright I can barely see.  Should I ask her to the dance or not? She sure seems to like that other guy alot. I'm just worried that she'll say no,  Well, here I go! Hope you guys like this!!! (I <3 poetry!!!) |
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Jun 13 2005, 06:02 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
I like it. It flows well and it's really cute.
'Her hair flows like a dark brown sea, Her eyes so bright I can barely see.' Love that line.  'The most beautiful thing I'd ever saw, That type of beauty should be against the law.' The most beautiful thing I'd ever That sentence was grammatically incorrect and the only major flaw. 
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Jun 13 2005, 06:31 PM
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 The Secret Hacker. Group: Member Posts: 1,780 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,712 |
heh. nice poem, reminds me of how im feeling now.
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Jun 13 2005, 07:00 PM
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Off topic, but the title, "About a Girl," is also the name of a song by Nirvana (from their first album, Bleach).
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Jun 13 2005, 07:23 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 70 Joined: Jun 2005 Member No: 151,633 |
Wow, thats good I like it!
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