Plague of Toads?, a poem |
 Jun 4 2005, 11:03 AM
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 Another ditch in the road... you keep moving  Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152  |
deviate
and celebrate demand recognition faceless masses cheer faceless idols thoughtlessness abounds think for the sake of thought for the sake of the dreamers the screamers standing in the centre all eyes turned away till one turns society burns plague of toads? croaking in the dark, shitty gutters? or a red rose grown from rotten leaves trodden to soil fresh turned loam sprouts growth turn the soil. plant the seed fear is for the cowards obvious? you talk shit like its poetry those faceless masses think its art because it rhymes free form feeling flows from fiery flights of fancy f**k it, i dont care about the rhymes assonance and discord stream from the mouth of the one with a face standing in the centre with all eyes turned away they'll turn ---- hmm... its been a while since i've written anything.. i like this |
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Jun 4 2005, 11:43 AM
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 fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
*Jumps and hugs you nodding, laughing*
James... I love the attitude and ...just everything |
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| *islandgirl4eva* |
Jun 4 2005, 01:02 PM
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I love your free-form style James.
This was a wonderful piece. |
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Jun 4 2005, 01:37 PM
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lol rebel
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| *stephinika* |
Jun 4 2005, 06:22 PM
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very nice! i love how you write james. great work as always.
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Jun 4 2005, 08:43 PM
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 iuvenesco Group: Member Posts: 427 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 101,221 |
haha, very nicely done
 I agree with RiddleMeWonders, the attitude gives it a nice edge 
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Jun 5 2005, 06:25 AM
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Another ditch in the road... you keep moving Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152 |
why thank you, everybody
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Jun 6 2005, 02:01 AM
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haha james you're so special. plague of the toads, wtf? lol but seriously...
i really liked your poem. i thought it was so very you =).i just wish the "eff it" part wasn't there =/ |
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| *Kathleen* |
Jun 6 2005, 01:29 PM
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That's so good, you could be a rapper.
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Jun 8 2005, 11:27 AM
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Another ditch in the road... you keep moving Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152 |
Hahaha
KATHLEEN THAT ROCKS. SO gonna do that |
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Jun 8 2005, 01:16 PM
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 creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
thats awesome! i thought you were going to mention plague of toads just onee more time...like towards the end >_< that line is what really caught my interest halfway through the poem and kept me reading. Its great, but i don't like the random bouts of rhyming too much
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Jun 8 2005, 08:12 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
Wow, that was so "out there". It's awesome! I agree with Kathleen, you could so totally be a rapper. You have that "style". Great job.
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