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 Jun 4 2005, 07:56 AM
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continue discussion on above titled post...
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Jun 4 2005, 06:20 PM
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It's alright, but I think you should try freewriting first. Getting into a rhyming scheme is hard enough. Try unrhymed poems first, and see how they go.
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Jun 6 2005, 01:45 AM
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aww..tragic love story =(. well written lots of emotion =). yes and like danish said try a free-form or prose poem i perfer those i think most people do xD
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Jun 6 2005, 01:27 PM
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QUOTE It's alright, but I think you should try freewriting first. Getting into a rhyming scheme is hard enough. Try unrhymed poems first, and see how they go. Yeah, it loses its flow in the latter half of it. Other than that, good job. |
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