12.17.04, old poem i just found |
 Jun 4 2005, 02:24 AM
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Everyday brings me one step closer to the edge
I am drowning in my crushed dreams and lost hopes I wonder where I went wrong I dream of a new life Then I see it, just sitting there It's blade glistens like a diamond Its calling my name I see my answer Picking it up and placing it on my skin I begin My release Its cuts deeper and deeper It winds around my wrist The blood trickles down like silent crimson tears I set it down and close my eyes I am calm......for now bw for those of you who are wondering i am currently 6 days clean of cutting! =) i am so proud of myself. This post has been edited by ItzOnlySydney: Jun 6 2005, 01:42 AM |
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Jun 4 2005, 08:16 AM
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 fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
*Whistles* I'm glad you wrote about something that is-was a big part of your life. It is well-done. Apart from very few publishing errors, (don't worry about those-they happen), I really liked it. I do wish you'd have put more of yourself into it. It seemed like you didn't want to make it personal, even though it was a very personal thing.
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Jun 6 2005, 01:41 AM
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^ yea i never claimed to have any grammar/ spelling editing quality ever lol
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Jun 6 2005, 01:25 PM
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QUOTE Everyday brings me one step closer to the edge Is this allusion to that Linkin Park song? As for the rest of it, wow, I'm glad you're no longer cutting. It's...bad. 
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Jun 6 2005, 01:28 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 100 Joined: Jun 2005 Member No: 148,928 |
Interesting poem. I hope you overcome your struggles.
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Jun 6 2005, 01:33 PM
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I noticed your gangster, Im pretty gangster myself Group: Member Posts: 67 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 116,683 |
why do you ppl cut your wrist???...
i don't get it???... what does it prove???... |
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Jun 6 2005, 02:14 PM
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 Sunlight--shine on me. Group: Member Posts: 433 Joined: Jun 2005 Member No: 149,201 |
I don't think people are trying to *prove* something necessarily. I mean I don't do it, but I understand why some people have done it (I have been diagnosed with severe depression, but I really do not like physical pain= hence, i don't do it). But they aren't trying to PROVE anything.
I think though by becoming completely free of cutting, it will help clear your mind. Very good job. -Molz |
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Jun 6 2005, 07:32 PM
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 a_walk_thru_hell* Group: Member Posts: 66 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 99,999 |
that's awesome! ive been almost 4 months clean and quite proud. but you should deffinitly write a lot. it will help to keep your mind busy and you wont have to think about hurting yourself.....GOOD LUCK! i hope you begin to heal soon.
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Jun 6 2005, 10:27 PM
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deleted Group: Member Posts: 3,168 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 92,276 |
QUOTE(Kathleen @ Jun 6 2005, 1:25 PM) Is this allusion to that Linkin Park song? As for the rest of it, wow, I'm glad you're no longer cutting. It's...bad.  haha when i was writing the poem i had that saying stuck in my head and i was like "omg where did i hear this?" ajnd then i was just like "ok whatever i make it part of poem" now i remember! |
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