It feels so right |
 May 19 2005, 07:19 PM
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before you came, i wasnt over my ex .
but now, my memory of him is hazy . i'm not quite sure what it is about you, but you've got me going crazy . something about your eyes, that tell me i can trust you . something about the way you smile, that makes me smile too . or maybe its the way you treat me, with teasing jokes, yet so kind . or the way you laugh, it haunts my mind . people may criticize, cuz the two of us might make a strange pair . but frankly, it doesnt matter . i'm falling for you, this i declare . i'm always thinking about you, from day to night . crushing on you, i must say , just feels so damn right . ... ... .... . . . ... . . eh, not my best, but whatevers (= |
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May 19 2005, 07:21 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
 Cute, but not really sophisticated. Using words such as "ex" and "cuz" makes it sound like slang (not very beautiful!), but the rhyming's okay and so is the flow. I like the concept as well. I'm sure you've done better, but this isn't too bad.
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May 24 2005, 04:38 AM
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aww so cute =)
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May 24 2005, 04:31 PM
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 highfive. Group: Member Posts: 1,301 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 32,951 |
Hehe. It's adorable.
The second and third stanza are my favorites. I hope he likes you back. Nice job. |
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