another untitled poem, yes, it sucks >< |
another untitled poem, yes, it sucks >< |
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you left me here
all alone sitting with a tear dripping down my cheek just dont speak you left me here and now im dead and weak to me you were my life but now i sit here with this knife dead and alone i should've known i should've listened to what they said i should've just sat there and bled but i didnt and now im suffering suffering suffering and now we're growing apart i tried to leave you but you wouldn't let me now, can't you see? just leave me be and i will leave this place forever and everything will be alright this knife is all i have left when i cut open my veins everything will be gone including my pains so now after i take my life everything will be alright and we can both sleep again... ...forever I wrote that during social studies today.. it's not too good, I know, but... I don't know.. suggestions..? any idea for a name..? |
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it's very nice, but for some reason it sort of sounds more like song lyrics to me than a poem. maybe it's just me, but that's what i think.
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