listen to my plea . |
 May 3 2005, 05:12 PM
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Senior Member  Group: Member Posts: 512 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 9,682  |
close my eyes
and count to three . listen to my only plea shield me from their wicked lies . help me finally see & let me realize, that you're the one for me . protect me from the rain of never-ending tears . make me forget about my pain, erase away all my fears . help me to stay sane, because as it appears, my love for you, i cannot feign . you've always been here, all these years . how could i have been so blind ? to shun you the way i did . lets leave all those memories behind . into the backs of our minds, where they should be hid . please accept my apology, thanks for listening to my plea . i hope that you'll forgive me , i hope that you too will see . it took me long to realize too, but in the end, i know that i'm still in love with you . |
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| *stephinika* |
May 3 2005, 10:39 PM
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not bad. it rhymes and flows pretty well and you got your idea across well. nice job.
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May 10 2005, 06:22 PM
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 ticktock. Group: Member Posts: 1,138 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 118,235 |
i like it! especially the way it rhymes =)
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| *not_your_average* |
May 10 2005, 07:22 PM
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wow... that sounds like something i would write! i love how it flows, excellent rhythm.
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May 13 2005, 09:40 PM
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 boo Group: Member Posts: 5,512 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 71,765 |
Excellent, I can really feel it. =)
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May 14 2005, 10:25 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,634 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,631 |
whoa...i liked it. the rhyming was goodQ!!
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