Angry Anti-Racist Poem, yes yes.. Options

[MrElsewhere]

Currently untitled..but here goes:

Most of us
Have learned to
Appreciate other cultures
And not disrespect them
But We have not learned
To appreciate each other
In the sense that
There is racism within each race
"You're white washed;
You're too dark;
You're too light."
We are who we are
The color of our skin
Our national origin
Is who we are
How We talk,
How We dress,
How We walk,
Does not change who we are

Just because I run
With a crew that's different
Than yours
Does not mean that I
Have forsaken who I am
What is it to be Asian?
What is it to be White?
What is it to be Black?
You are who you are

So tell me how you can act
White
How can you act
Black
How can you act
Asian

The members of those races define this
How to act
White
How to act
Black
How to act
Asian

There should not be a definition
There should be no way to act
White
To act
Black
To act
Asian

This is something you are
You are
White
You are
Black
You are
Asian

I
Am
White

I
Am
Black

I
Am
Asian


I don't know about this one..

[*nightmare4taki*]

I like it. Nice Job.

[Paradox of Life]

A bit redundant. Maybe you shouldn't repeat BLACK WHITE ASIAN like a bajillion times. I like the concept though. Nice job :)

[racoons > you]

yeah... the concept is good... so is the structure... but its not really that 'poetic'... it reads a little bit like just a sentence

[gOODpIRATE]

yeah... the concept is good... so is the structure... but its not really that 'poetic'... it reads a little bit like just a sentence

yes, he is right. but the concept is very good. good job, really

[sikdragon]

what about italian people and hispanics? What about african and english people? You're grouping people just like those you preach against? how hypocritical can one person get.. how long will it take you to realize, there is no such thing as race. We're all people. It's people like you that make prejudices so strong. It's your fault that hate thrives. I blame you for hate crimes.

not all asians live in asia. if they live in america they're american end of story. If theyre caucasian and live in america, they're american. Affirmative action is bullshit. Scholarships should depend on ability not color. Entrance into school should depend on ability not color. Jobs should depend on qualification not color.

anti-racists cause more damage than nazis,the KKK, and extremist groups of the like.

KNOW YOUR ENEMY.

non-argumentative:it seemed like you wanted it to be powerful, but you failed from the start. I suggest a rewrite. try reading it aloud. the rhyme scheme should either be consistant or non-existent.


note:if you dont want controversial argument then dont post controversial poems/songs.

[racoons > you]

what about italian people and hispanics? What about african and english people? You're grouping people just like those you preach against? how hypocritical can one person get.. how long will it take you to realize, there is no such thing as race. We're all people. It's people like you that make prejudices so strong. It's your fault that hate thrives. I blame you for hate crimes.

you're talking crap. did you even read the last few lines? shes/h eisnt grouping, she's aknowledging the wrongs of pre-grouping. you seriously misubderstood this poem. or you're stupid, and want to sound really serious, and failed abysmally

[sikdragon]

apparently i went over your head... BTW, abysmally doesn't quite fit that sentence. try opening the dictionary.

She's being contradictory and hypocritical in the same statement. If you can't see that then you need to reread it quite a few more times. It's really quite clear.

[racoons > you]

abysmally is a synonym for horrifically, badly, terribly, etc. multiple meanings, my friend

'It's people like you that make prejudices so strong'

also, i forgot to mention this earlier... do you not find it in anyway ironic that you said this in the same string of posts as you used the words ;faggot' and 'effiminate weirdo'? do i smell self righteousness?

[sikdragon]

im glad you asked that. homosexuality is a group based on belief and choice rather than birth. Therefore the person can know before hand what sort of obstacles they may face before signing up. It's not ironic at all.

as for your wording, i just think it was more than necassary.

[racoons > you]

im glad you asked that. homosexuality is a group based on belief and choice rather than birth

you're quite wrong, but i will refer you to the homosexuality debate in the debate section, rather than lecturing you now, as i sense that that may be a waste of time,as judging from your other post, you seem far to infatuated witha faith which promotes this ignorant and intolerant idea, and seem unlikely to change, no matter how much logic and goos sense comes your way

[RiddleMeWonders]

I think you guys should take this to debate.

And I don't think that all that was necessary Chris. Just because he left out some ethnicities does not mean he causes rascim. He's standing up against it. He wrote what he sees, what he knows, what he witnesses. Maybe there aren't many people besides the groups he listed there where he's from.

[sikdragon]

i didnt want to debate you. That would be like taking a step backward. you wanna know where i stand and how much indisputable evidence i can present. Just talk to fae and her minions who kicked me out of debate lol. homosexuality is a choice, just like choosing creamcicle or jugs on the porn stand. *mag names from family guy* It's a taste. We choose what we like. fetishes are acquired not inherited.

lemme tell you im far from ignorant and intolerant. you know nothing. ignorance is without knowledge of. I know as much as i need to, and yet im still learning. intolerance, yes that explains my motto love the evildoer hate the evil. you're so dang colorful you've become blind. things are simpler in black and white. things are right in black and white.


It's not the fact that ethnicities are missing it's the fact that the poet chose to acknowledge the hate gave it it's power. that's all folks.

[MrElsewhere]

You misunderstand me.

And my poem. I will concede that fact that it is not my best, but I give something power by acknowledging it? What would happen if we left it un-acknowledged? Just try to hide it, as if it didn't exist. But you see, it will continue to exist. How can we get rid of it if we do not acknowledge it? How can we abolish racism if nobody knows about it?

Race will always exist. The color of my skin shouldn't matter. But it does. Even if it is a little. People have pre-conceptions and stereotypes of other races. And that is called predjudice.

I know that we are all one race: human. But we can be proud of where we come from, and our heritage, as well as be another face in the crowd, no?

[..:loveee.NuTTii]

^Amen
Well, as MarchHare2UrAlice said before it has a good concept, but it's not really that poetical. I love how you repeat certain phrases over and over again-it really carries the message across to the reader.

[sikdragon]

how can there be racism if no one knows about it?

[MrElsewhere]

how can there be racism if no one knows about it?

How can a tree exist, if no one ever looks upon it?

How can an animal exist if nobody ever discovers it?

[Paradox of Life]

Definitions of abysmally:


adverb: in a terrible manner

(http://rhymezone.com/r/rhyme.cgi?Word=abysmally&typeofrhyme=def&org1=syl&org2=l)

Sikdragon, since appearantly the only thing you an do is act like your greater than everyone else and attempt to put down everyone else's work, I should point out that most of the time you're proven wrong and just refuse to admit it. James has like totally verbally beaten you up by simply countering your judgements with facts. You need to open up a dictionary and maybe try a few psychology books as well because you don't have excellent communication skills.

OMG 100th post!

So, anyway.. I'll be on my way now..

[sikdragon]

how can i be proven wrong and verbally beaten, when the assailant has no idea what im talking about?

statements like the first one i posted above will now be going in PM, because apparently no one else will take the time to understand it before they criticize.

congrats on your 100th post.

about abysmally, i just thought it rather extreme.

[akjsd]

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[sikdragon]

theyre not supposed to make sense to anyone other than the thread starter.

[gladz612]

hem... i like your poem... but i personally think rascism will always exist.. plus alot of it is hidden..

[MrElsewhere]

i understand what you're saying fine, i just don't agree with it.