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Its a lil' laker rap I made, Don't worry, this ones mine..
HongKongDong
post Apr 22 2005, 12:45 AM
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I'm taking a break of trying to get warned... its hard work mellow.gif

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XInitialDPnoiX (11:21:40 PM): The reason I think you wouldn't like it, is because its a lil' rap I made about my team the Lakers
M1SSxCHR1SSY (11:22:22 PM): Post it Rik
XInitialDPnoiX (11:22:39 PM): why?
M1SSxCHR1SSY (11:22:46 PM): Because I say so.
XInitialDPnoiX (11:23:08 PM): ph34r.gif ok...


Now onto my rap about my team, the Lakers

Kobe and Shaq's love was faded.
Then they both got mad and Shaq got traded.
Dr. Buss just thought Shaq was washed up old and tired.
Then Phil Jackson got fired.
Then I couldn't belive my three-peat Lakers started to leave.
Malone tried to hit on Kobe's wife at the lakers game.
Have you seen such a veteran seem like a damn lame?
Damn this whole season was nothing but chaos.
Damn, now I sit here watching them not even make the playoffs.
The media taking cheap shots at Kobe but it only makes him higher.
Like he said, all these haters just fuel the fire.
I guess 'till now he actually realizes a team by yourself is hard to manage.
But he's down to take on this challenge
Yo right now theres a frown on his face
But dont worry Laker fans, there will be better days.
Listen, much love to my idol..
I'm just hoping he will help bring back the title to L.A. some day
 
 
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Terror
post Apr 22 2005, 01:42 AM
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it wasnt all that good, mostly simple rhymes. not too new or creative, flow wasnt so hot. 5/10
 
*basick*
post Apr 22 2005, 01:44 AM
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thats more like a grade school poem... oh shit you rhymed tired with fired... try expierementing with complex rhyme schemes and multi sylabble rhyming
 
Terror
post Apr 22 2005, 01:54 AM
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yeah no offense it kinda sounded like some stuff from 3rd graders
 
HongKongDong
post Apr 22 2005, 02:48 PM
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Hahahahahahah... its all good. This type of stuff ain't my style. So when I put down a rap don't expect anything good wink.gif laugh.gif
 
HelloSunshine
post Apr 23 2005, 12:33 AM
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Well, I liked it happy.gif I'm a Laker fan as well..and I'm disappointed that they didn't make the playoffs -.- but anyways, nice Laker rap happy.gif
 

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