yea a poem for a writing contest |
 Apr 11 2005, 10:01 PM
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it was a spur of the moment thing i am sorta iffy on it so what do you think? btw it would nice if i could have suggestions for a title. i am bad at titles =/:
running from life but getting no where someone please help me! trapped inside a glass box screaming loudly though no one seems to hear can't you see my smile is fake? i'm crying for help someone please help me take me away from this horrible place i wanna go home! but where is home? has everyone abandoned me? where are the people i thought i could trust someone please help me! i'm bleeding now the knife's fallen to the floor someone please help me crying tears of shame i wanna go home! some please take me home i'm waiting for my hero where are you? someone please help me! hello? is anyone there? why can't you hear my screams? please help me..before it's too late |
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Apr 12 2005, 01:33 AM
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 One of the few Group: Member Posts: 44 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 35,074 |
I just love the expression it sends to me. I'm no poet expert but watever expresses your own thoughts ideals and heart..that poem is just pure gold.
haha that sounded sappy but hey..I like the poem soo yea 
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Apr 12 2005, 02:56 AM
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 Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
if you like it like that make it into someone yelling into the reciever of a phone. and title "A Dead Life Line" voila there's gold.
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Apr 12 2005, 03:50 PM
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QUOTE(mystah_danger @ Apr 12 2005, 1:33 AM) I just love the expression it sends to me. I'm no poet expert but watever expresses your own thoughts ideals and heart..that poem is just pure gold. haha that sounded sappy but hey..I like the poem soo yea  thanks so much! i thought ppl would say stuff like "omg! it's so stupid! get over yourself". lol that comment meant a lot to me thanks so much =) |
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Apr 12 2005, 03:52 PM
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 Another ditch in the road... you keep moving Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152 |
bomb-squad... as the title
like an emotional timebomb which bneeds to be diffused... yeah... i'll edit back witha better one |
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Apr 12 2005, 07:06 PM
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One of the few Group: Member Posts: 44 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 35,074 |
QUOTE thanks so much! i thought ppl would say stuff like "omg! it's so stupid! get over yourself". lol that comment meant a lot to me thanks so much =) lol...glad i could be of some help =] |
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Apr 12 2005, 09:13 PM
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 This is all my luck, it's all I got. Group: Member Posts: 1,373 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 76,532 |
I like it. Good job. =]
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