Son, The Father I Never Had |
 Mar 23 2005, 10:51 PM
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The day I hold my son and cry gently as he takes his first breaths of air is a day years beyond my expectation. However, that day is the day when the burden of my sould will finally be lifted and I can be the father that I never had. When the time comes, I'll buy him a hoop and put it together improperly so he can laugh at my wrongdoings and we can assemble it the right way; together. As he gets older, I'll teach him how to throw a perfect spiral and explain to him how a most peculiar game of inconsistent movement, violent contact and ingenius strategies will teach him how to be a leader. With that, my son and I will sit down and play a game of chess so he'll always know the enxt move in life to make. Instead of forcing him to read and write at his own leisure, I'll build him a bookcase full of literary classics as well as books by authors such as Langston Hughes to remind him of the struggle. He'll have access to a computer as well as access to all genres of music so his musical tastes aren't limited to that of his stereotyped culture. But most of all, the day I hold my son and cry gently as he takes his first breaths of air is the day when he'll become my world.
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| *lolita kitty* |
Mar 23 2005, 10:55 PM
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awwwww that was lovely! you write really good.
i love it ^_^ - cassie |
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Mar 24 2005, 10:06 AM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
all i can say is WOW!
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Mar 24 2005, 02:21 PM
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It's not me whos the problem... Group: Member Posts: 50 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 110,422 |
I like how you wrap up your feelings at the end and how well the lines flow with the begining. I'd like to see more of your writing. Good Job.
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Mar 24 2005, 04:46 PM
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QUOTE(trail_of_memories @ Mar 24 2005, 1:21 PM) I like how you wrap up your feelings at the end and how well the lines flow with the begining. I'd like to see more of your writing. Good Job.  Thanks. In light of these troubling times in which I live, I have to write to maintain my sanity. I'll post more but I'm still a bit apprehensive about sharing what I hold so dear. |
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Apr 10 2005, 05:45 PM
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 ticktock. Group: Member Posts: 1,138 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 118,235 |
WOW; I love the way you say "I can be the father that I never had"
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Apr 10 2005, 09:34 PM
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QUOTE(x3__iGiVEup @ Apr 10 2005, 4:45 PM) WOW; I love the way you say "I can be the father that I never had" In no way am I trying to discredit my father. He's not perfect and despite his mishaps and shortcomings, I still love him. Still, I desperately want a son. |
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| *islandgirl4eva* |
Apr 11 2005, 01:02 AM
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That was beautiful. You sound so sincere, and I'm sure you are. It makes me sad to say that you're the first guy I've heard talk like this. It's amazing.
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Apr 11 2005, 01:52 AM
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 hello : ) Group: Official Member Posts: 4,227 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 13,139 |
Aww Brandon I love it
 Great job =] I understand what you mean now, about your dad and all.
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Apr 11 2005, 02:55 PM
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^_^ Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,141 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 91,466 |
Thanks Chrissy
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