heartache is the perfect inspiration |
 Mar 17 2005, 11:43 PM
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 LunchboxXx  Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810  |
not finished. i'm tired.
HEARTACHE IS THE PERFECT INSPIRATION This pen, this lonely pen He is my only friend My love and I subset Filling me with regret So… I WRITE IT (DOWN) can’t even sleep a wink my blood is in this ink I take my heartache And smear it on this paper This night that fate betrayed me The price I can’t stop paying Those long lost summer evening Begin my tortured grieving So… I WRITE IT (DOWN) can’t even sleep a wink my blood is in this ink I take my heartache And smear it on this paper She always found the worst times To moisten both of my eyes Her apathy is astounding That night, I woke my family with the KEYBOARD POUNDING! So… I WRITE IT (DOWN) can’t even sleep a wink my blood is in this ink I take my heartache And smear it on this paper |
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Mar 17 2005, 11:46 PM
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 crushed. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,432 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,026 |
that's really true..all the things that you wrote. I hope you finish it soon.
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Mar 17 2005, 11:54 PM
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 hello : ) Group: Official Member Posts: 4,227 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 13,139 |
I love it. I can relate to it. The way you described everything was done well too. Post the finished version! I look forward to reading it =]
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| *Kathleen* |
Mar 18 2005, 12:03 AM
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Aww...I really like that title.
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Mar 20 2005, 12:59 AM
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LunchboxXx Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810 |
thanks, fellas! i'm writing another song right now about the protest i went to today. in the meantime, more people should leave happy comments about this one =].
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Mar 20 2005, 03:27 AM
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Brie Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,172 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,548 |
Oh my God, I love it.
Just....wow. And to think it's unfinished! Wonderful job. I really, really love this one. |
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Mar 20 2005, 03:44 AM
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 I'll never be who I was again.. Group: Member Posts: 2,886 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 77,981 |
nice poem..i can really relate to it..
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Mar 20 2005, 09:57 PM
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 i've never wanted anything rationale. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,449 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,045 |
I take my heartache
And smear it on this paper ^lovely. keep it up |
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| *islandgirl4eva* |
Mar 20 2005, 10:20 PM
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Heartache really is my numero uno source of inspiration. You put it to great use here. I love it.
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Mar 20 2005, 10:28 PM
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 Word. Group: Member Posts: 3,004 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 34,673 |
that was pretty good, one of the only cb writting topic things i ever read.
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| *salcha* |
Mar 22 2005, 03:10 AM
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i lovvee it: i take my heartache and smear it on this paper.
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Mar 22 2005, 12:09 PM
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 heh, that poor girl Group: Member Posts: 234 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 64,896 |
I love it
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Mar 22 2005, 06:04 PM
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 my <3 is in Ohio Group: Member Posts: 899 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,599 |
the stuff you wrote is so true. it's really good
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Mar 22 2005, 06:38 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 628 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 98,376 |
you're really talented...that poem was awesome
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