Useless, a doodle in spanish class. |
 Mar 9 2005, 09:45 PM
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 highfive.  Group: Member Posts: 1,301 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 32,951  |
Useless
My heart is empty. For nothing is inside. and all the true of me. I must always hide. As I bleed painfully, my heart is pouring out. My mind, my whole world, always filled with doubt. All negative thoughts, there is not sudden good, and along the deserved lines of life, I don't do what I should. My good thoughts escaped. I don't have much or a lot. The only thing I wanted, was just sitting there to rot. It's like I couldn't capture. It's like I couldn't see, why musn't they love me, for as much as i love thee. The candle is burning. Time is running out, all my memeories avoided or blocked, plus all the pain shouts. Poison slips in at nine, at eleven or ten or five, and as I slowly close my eyes, this is my last goodbye. |
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Mar 9 2005, 10:32 PM
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 rwar (; Group: Member Posts: 590 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 103,308 |
nice poem (:
i like the last paragraph best ! [= |
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Mar 14 2005, 09:28 PM
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 Lenne Group: Member Posts: 51 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,257 |
 how dark. xp very nice. =]
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Mar 14 2005, 09:39 PM
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 i'm a d0rk =) Group: Member Posts: 209 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 88,870 |
i really like it =) . i felt like that at one point of my life...
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Mar 14 2005, 09:57 PM
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 Imperfect... Group: Member Posts: 286 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 55,064 |
that was great...i can almost imagine myself being in that position.
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Mar 15 2005, 10:55 AM
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 .::imma psycho @ heart::. Group: Member Posts: 38 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 113,242 |
it was really a cool poem...it brought all my thoughts intu perspective...
very sadd tho...
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Mar 18 2005, 01:28 AM
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 crushed. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,432 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,026 |
aw..how sad..my favorite part is the second paragraph about the bleeding.
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Mar 28 2005, 07:31 PM
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 Do you miss your little girl? Group: Member Posts: 181 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 68,851 |
really awesome poem. You've got a lot of talet. :)
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Mar 30 2005, 11:51 AM
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that was awesome. i loved the last paragraph.
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Mar 30 2005, 02:16 PM
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 Another ditch in the road... you keep moving Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152 |
^^
they are called stanzas. i <3 the last stanza the rest is just awright for me, dawg. lol.. randy jackson... |
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