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 Mar 5 2005, 02:09 AM
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 LunchboxXx  Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810  |
She’s living, dying proof
I am a slave to this feeling This ecstasy This forbidden art no one can master My heart and mind lay in her palm Her fist clenched tight I want them back I need them back right now All the sweat I wish I’d never shed Will drip a hole into my forehead In this hell that she and I erected Why did I let my guard down? You expected anything less than mixed feelings? I hate you, you selfish, maleficent jezebel Drown in your morbid liquor of my tears Liquor of my tears I melted for you With your frozen heart Glimpses of your smile were a treasure All but not, forever buried, in the sands of your apathy I was a rose that sawed off my thorns You made me dry up and be gone with the wind After you stomped on and spat on my dry pedals |
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| *wind&fire* |
Mar 5 2005, 02:20 AM
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oh i thought you changed style to sound like snoop dog.. i as like NOOOOOOOOOO!!!!
GJ... its a long time since ive heard some one say jezebel |
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Mar 5 2005, 02:25 AM
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LunchboxXx Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810 |
^ hahaha. i should definetly write a rap. hehe
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| *wind&fire* |
Mar 5 2005, 02:26 AM
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^ i think ive said that to you before... and you where like
"no...just no" |
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| *stephinika* |
Mar 5 2005, 04:01 AM
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lol interesting title...but yeah, i liked it. great emotions. lovely vocabulary too.
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Mar 6 2005, 03:16 PM
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 The Secret Hacker. Group: Member Posts: 1,780 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,712 |
QUOTE(stephinika @ Mar 5 2005, 1:01 AM) lol interesting title...but yeah, i liked it. great emotions. lovely vocabulary too.  agreed. the vocabulary is profound. |
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Mar 8 2005, 02:25 AM
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Brie Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,172 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,548 |
Wow, that was very, very good.
Word Choice - 100%.  Good job. I love the way it flows. |
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| *Kathleen* |
Mar 9 2005, 06:39 PM
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*Cough* NICE SIGNATURE.
 Hehe. Nice poem, too. 
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Mar 9 2005, 09:55 PM
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Newbie Group: Member Posts: 1 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 110,188 |
hey kathleen, i think your really really hot cuzi sw your pic in your profile
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Mar 11 2005, 06:49 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 7,025 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 4,051 |
^wtf? haha
very nice, like always. your poetry is always filled with emotion. I love it |
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