a poem, to do with my CB name |
 Feb 8 2005, 12:09 PM
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 Another ditch in the road... you keep moving  Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152  |
Come with me down the rabbit hole
in the bathroom of the club down the paths that Alice trod 'cross the little brooks to duchess's house and off to Din where dwells the jaberwock the lion and the unicorn are sitting at the bar and tweedle dee and tweedle dum are dressing up for war. the mock turtle is singing the king talks to the knave come kiss me 'neath the chesire's grin and watch the courtiers play the queen will come to take our heads while the hatter drinks his tea ill be your march hare, will you be my ecstasy? ...what do you think i know it has no particular structure, but that was kinda my intent |
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Feb 8 2005, 12:33 PM
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 fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
Good work.
You should try to get some photography to go along with this poem... Like I don't know. Modern day Tweedle Dee and Tweedle Dum.. It's got great potential. I'm tell you... Yeah.. Keep up the Imagery. - Lindsey |
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Feb 8 2005, 03:19 PM
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^^
i agree the imagery is great. i love the whole idea though...sounds fantastic. 
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Feb 9 2005, 01:22 AM
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 Want fries with that? Group: Member Posts: 692 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 50,652 |
Wow I love it! It sounds bouncy in my head! =) Very creative
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Feb 11 2005, 02:25 PM
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Another ditch in the road... you keep moving Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152 |
thank you for the feed back
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