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 Feb 3 2005, 04:20 PM
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 Canadian Boyfriend, I think it's time  Group: Member Posts: 450 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 40,705  |
I dont have a title for this one, so yeah..if anyone has any ideas, id like to hear them. ^^
Save me now, hold your breath The core in my shell is being sentenced to death Unspeakable anger held inside Bounties of my splender are old and dried Beating intensely on four walls Deep, dark, down I fall Shadows passing;world fades away Eyes will never see the light of day Sharp whips beat slashes on my back Blindness consumed in the already pitch black Running in circles;no escape Unbelievable terror;can't intake Gasping for air;drowned from air Excessive pain in this hell of a lair Eyes slowly closing;lungs exhale Won't ever live to tell the tale Blood in veins slow their speed Tragic death taking the lead Heart beat stops;frigid cold Story of my death has finally been told Not one of my best 
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Feb 3 2005, 04:30 PM
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 rainy days fade away.. Group: Member Posts: 566 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 58,261 |
maybe call it "story of my death" boring i know. so am i
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Feb 3 2005, 07:18 PM
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not bad. i like it. i like the ending.
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Feb 4 2005, 07:57 AM
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Canadian Boyfriend, I think it's time Group: Member Posts: 450 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 40,705 |
QUOTE(stephinika @ Feb 3 2005, 7:18 PM) not bad. i like it. i like the ending.  Thank you. 
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