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 Jan 27 2005, 11:20 PM
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 LunchboxXx  Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810  |
2:10 a.m.
And I couldn't get you off my mind I beckon for sleep I will if you ever let me Invading my dreams I am your willing captor The sorrow of your absence I need you more than I thought What won’t I do for you? I swear I’ll wait Through hell, high water, Damnation and a day I’ll battle the elements The apocalyptic storms For you there’s nothing I won’t do Just to feel your warmth in my arms. Tonight I lay Longing to just talk to you Your picture clenched in my hand Missing you till days anew I seek relief Your smile shining in my vision The sorrow in your absence I need you more than I thought What won’t I do for you? I swear I’ll wait Through hell, high water, Damnation and a day I’ll battle the elements The apocalyptic storms For you there’s nothing I won’t do Just to feel your warmth in my arms. I believe this is yours I found it beating in my chest Put it where it belongs Hanging from your necklace 3:10 a.m. Wait for your smile shining through I need you more than I thought I need you and I love you What won’t I do for you? I swear I’ll wait Through hell, high water, Damnation and a day I’ll battle the elements The apocalyptic storms For you there’s nothing I won’t do Just to feel your warmth in my arms. If I knew every language in the world And wrote you a love song with a nonexistent end It would still come up short of complete It would still be an understatement if you can help me think of a name that'd be groovy. <3 |
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Jan 27 2005, 11:24 PM
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 stephanie .. Group: Member Posts: 1,965 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 15,529 |
This completely reflects the last entry I commented on on your LiveJournal.
 It's awesome, though, as are all of your pieces.  Edit // This is Kathleen. I didn't realize I was logged in on Steph's account still. 
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| *stephinika* |
Jan 27 2005, 11:27 PM
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wow well done. i really like it.
 i quite like the chorus too. title? hmm...sorry i got nothing right now. 
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Jan 29 2005, 02:14 AM
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Brie Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,172 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,548 |
AH.
I love this one. Jeez, you're just on a roll! :P I'm really feeling this one. I love the chorus. Just...excellent job. =] |
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| *wind&fire* |
Jan 29 2005, 08:27 AM
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they flow to you ... get lyrical
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Jan 29 2005, 09:08 AM
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 Canadian Boyfriend, I think it's time Group: Member Posts: 450 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 40,705 |
Wow. That was truly amazing. I'm not very good at titles because everytime I make up one, I sound like a retard. ^^
But VERY good job. (you HAVE to tell me who this person is!) |
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Jan 29 2005, 12:06 PM
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 Crying Behind Blind Eyes Group: Member Posts: 257 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,967 |
This is beautiful...I mean, there's nothing I can say to criticize this. No need for improvements. This is...beautiful, and heart-felt.
For a title...maybe "Damnation and a Day", just because it's a line that repeats frequently and is kind of catchy. It may not really fit as a title to this, however. |
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Jan 29 2005, 01:36 PM
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LunchboxXx Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810 |
QUOTE(AzNbUbZ @ Jan 29 2005, 8:27 AM) they flow to you ... get lyrical  what's that mean? |
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