a fourth grade writing prompt, rewritten |
 Jan 24 2005, 06:15 PM
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 i am a liar  Group: Member Posts: 69 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 77,216  |
a fourth grade writing prompt, rewritten.
my best friend? never talks back, except when i do, shouts and screams and cries when i do, when i want to my best friend tells all of my deepest secrets but only to a spiral bound journal, where nobody else knows. my best friend is artificial material replaced often and worn with abuse. my best friend? is mechanical, with point five lead. silver, with a black rubber grip, and the eraser comes out when you twist the top. |
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Jan 24 2005, 06:22 PM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
wow that's awesome! lol totally wasn't expecting this part:
QUOTE my best friend? is mechanical, with point five lead. silver, with a black rubber grip, and the eraser comes out when you twist the top lol totally made me smile! great job! 
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Jan 24 2005, 08:23 PM
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i like it! it has a nice twist at the end!
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Jan 24 2005, 08:24 PM
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wow thats great. i really like the last verse too.
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Jan 24 2005, 10:17 PM
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 WANTED..for sexyness Group: Member Posts: 1,050 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 77,290 |
thats awsome. good job.
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Jan 25 2005, 01:30 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,634 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,631 |
QUOTE(xtransatlanticismx @ Jan 24 2005, 6:15 PM) a fourth grade writing prompt, rewritten. my best friend? never talks back, except when i do, shouts and screams and cries when i do, when i want to my best friend tells all of my deepest secrets but only to a spiral bound journal, where nobody else knows. my best friend is artificial material replaced often and worn with abuse. my best friend? is mechanical, with point five lead. silver, with a black rubber grip, and the eraser comes out when you twist the top.  wow..i loved it!!!!!!!! that's a really great ending and all. |
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Jan 25 2005, 07:59 AM
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WANTED..for sexyness Group: Member Posts: 1,050 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 77,290 |
awsome job! i love it.
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Jan 25 2005, 06:21 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,498 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 25,711 |
lol thats unexpected. but it's a cool poem =D
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