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post Jan 23 2005, 09:38 PM
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I hate the way…



I hate the way you never call

I hate the way you never write

I hate the way you look at me

And how your always right

I hate the way you’d hug me

And the way you’d stare

I hate the way you’d laugh at me

But always seem to care

I hate that look in your eye

The one you’d always get

When you would just hold me

And tell me every thing you meant

I hate the way you’d hold me

And the way you’d kiss

I hate all the stupid things

That I'd seem to miss

But what I hate most of all

Is what I said I’d never do

I hate the way you tripped me

So I’d fall in love with you

Now let me make this very clear

And tell you what is true

I hate the way you broke my wall

And how I still love you


LeKeyshia Marie Richardson

©2005 LeKeyshia Marie Richardson


i wrote this because i wanted to tell this guy i still love that i hate it how ...etc, but yet i still love him, i havn't given it to him yet, dont know if i will.... sad.gif well please tell me what ya'll think! thanks!
 
 
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xxruinedsoulxx
post Jan 23 2005, 09:49 PM
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this is wonderful
 
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post Jan 24 2005, 06:24 PM
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lol i like it! it reminds me of that movie "10 things i hate about you" lol, you should see it, it's good.
 
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post Jan 24 2005, 07:32 PM
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QUOTE(KissMe2408 @ Jan 24 2005, 6:24 PM)
lol i like it! it reminds me of that movie "10 things i hate about you" lol, you should see it, it's good.
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Same. But it was really good. I liked it happy.gif
 
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post Jan 24 2005, 07:45 PM
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pretty good. reminds me also of that movie, ten things i hate about u.
 
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post Jan 24 2005, 08:23 PM
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wow i love it. i can totally relate
 
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post Jan 24 2005, 08:27 PM
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well done. i like the concept though it seems almost cliche to me but i like how you wrote it. good job.
 
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post Jan 25 2005, 04:26 PM
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biggrin.gif wow i'm really glad everyone likes it, i meant for it to be bipolar to the beginning, because it's saying i hate how...*blah blah blah* but yet i still love you and i hate that, becaues were not together nemore, idk if anyone got that whole thing, but i'm glad everyone likes it laugh.gif
 
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post Jan 25 2005, 04:39 PM
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I can relate... But yeah, I like how you maintained the rythm of the movie, but did you're own thing with it. Very cool.
 
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post Jan 28 2005, 09:02 PM
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wow i almost cried..that was so sweet, and i can pretty much relate to that

show it to the guy. :-)
 
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post Jan 28 2005, 10:27 PM
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Very nice job. I like how it's written, made people think of its meaning. =]
 
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post Jan 28 2005, 10:52 PM
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wow i'm pleased with all the positive feedback biggrin.gif but i've never seen that movie....i just came up with it..... _unsure.gif but i am glad everyone likes it! well if the guy would call me, write me, or get online, i would show it to him but unfortuantley i'm about to have to just give up on the guy because i aint getting into anything like a relationship w/out good communication....but it's his loss i suppose.... sad.gif
 
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post Jan 30 2005, 12:13 PM
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woww i love it. loved the ending so deep.
 
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post Jan 30 2005, 12:47 PM
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i love it! and i know exactly what ur feeling
 
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post Jan 30 2005, 09:05 PM
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Seems a little too cliche for me, but it's nice.

I could swear I've heard this before.
 
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post Jan 30 2005, 09:13 PM
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In my opinion, which you probably don't want, your adjectives aren't precise enough. &also get your own ideas, the beggining is almost identical to the poem used in the moive. I think that it's good though, you could do a lot with it. Keep it up, I wish you the best of luck.
 
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post Jan 31 2005, 04:43 PM
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In my opinion, which you probably don't want, your adjectives aren't precise enough. &also get your own ideas, the beggining is almost identical to the poem used in the moive.


i dont want to sound sarcastic and angry but for one i do want opinon's um that's kinda why i posted it. and for two, what do you mean get my own ideas? THOSE ARE MY F@%$^#G IDEA'S!!! mad.gif okay if you actually read my posts i said i HAVE NEVER SEEN that movie and didn't hear about that movie until after it came out of Video/DVD, okay? so how can u say get my own ideas when it came out of my own D*$% head??? huh.gif so read below to refresh your memory


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LostInMyKryptonite Posted Jan 28 2005, 9:52 PM
  wow i'm pleased with all the positive feedback  but i've never seen that movie....i just came up with it.....  but i am glad everyone likes it! well if the guy would call me, write me, or get online, i would show it to him but unfortuantley i'm about to have to just give up on the guy because i aint getting into anything like a relationship w/out good communication....but it's his loss i suppose.... 


now on a better note i do appreciate the fact that you wish me luck on future poems. didn't mean to blow up but it pisses me off when people dont take time to read replys by the person who posted. because that usually will tell you alot of information.


and PS: i still dont even know what the h&%% that movie is about....
 
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post Jan 31 2005, 05:27 PM
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this is only the internet. it wasn't a personal attack, &I'm sorry that I didn't read the posts before replying. are we cool?
 
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post Feb 1 2005, 09:20 PM
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yeah were cool, sorry i just get really defensive when people dont read and then accuse me of copying or imitating wither it was implied or unintentional, it came off like u were saying i was copying it, so i got defensive because i've never seen that movie and i've had soooo many people think i'm copying things just because it sounds like something else, i dont do that, it wouldn't be right if i did that, but these are my 100% out of my head ideas. lol. sorry agian. happy.gif
 
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