keep your tears dry, ive started writing again Options

[Heathasm]

Keep your tears dry, girl, when that amazing nerve just pop pops again
Keep it to your organs as your liver plays bloody murder by the gallon
The devils trill, girl; you know who that is? He makes you cut your fingers
Over, and over again
See, we go ‘round, and it never stops until complete self control and freedom is achieved
It’s funny, because I always hated the ferris wheel
Find that last piece of human inside you, girl and feed that to the dogs
Redemption is around the corner, will that be an axe or forgiveness in your outstretched hand?
Could you promise yourself that the eyes lips and vanity would still be just as intense;
As it is now, its all in your head-
That collage of minced meat just twisting people’s innocence into malicious deeds
History can f**k itself, this is now; context clues and backed-up suspicions don’t oblige
This is a new generation, any more of binded fingers covering your mouth with their hands
Keep these lines to your tears, girl, cry low and don’t ever let it show

[*stephinika*]

i love it. great word choice and everything. very nice.

[inthemudhole]

Whoa, that's awesome, Heather!

Nice job! [=
Yeah, I love your choice of words. ;D

[Heathasm]

thanks guys ^-^

[Gypsy Eyes]

awesome! I love it, it's very descriptive and has amazing imagery. Nice job!

[redpeony]

i really hate to be anal, but you can't keep tears dry. try eyes?

other than that though, it's really good.

[TreesTurnMeOn]

i really hate to be anal, but you can't keep tears dry. try eyes?

other than that though, it's really good.

*sigh* It's not one of those things that is supposed to make since. It just....is. That's the thing about poetry.



And Heather, that was awesome. You were all descriptive and I could feel how you were feeling. *steals writing abilities and runs away like a maniac* Now SUFFER! Mwahaha.

[Heathasm]

i really hate to be anal, but you can't keep tears dry. try eyes?

other than that though, it's really good.

not every thing means exactly what it says, you have to think about the phrase "keep your tears dry" means when you cry dont let any one see you do it

thanks every one for the wonderful comments ^-^

[KissMe2408]

i really hate to be anal, but you can't keep tears dry. try eyes?

other than that though, it's really good.

It's poetry...not all things make sense. you have to look beyond the words and understand the meaning the author is trying to portray.

hehe oh, and i thought the poem was excellent! two thumbs up. You really know how to paint a picture in someones mind, and great choice of words you used!!

oh by the way i loved this part:

History can f**k itself, this is now; context clues and backed-up suspicions don’t oblige
This is a new generation, any more of binded fingers covering your mouth with their hands
Keep these lines to your tears, girl, cry low and don’t ever let it show

Great writing, keep it up!

[imadorkabledxd]

Find that last piece of human inside you, girl and feed that to the dogs


Keep these lines to your tears, girl, cry low and don’t ever let it show

i love those lines =) and i'll keep that line to my tears :)

[xtransatlanticis...]

i love this