hurt me one last time |
 Jan 8 2005, 02:19 AM
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 LunchboxXx  Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810  |
HURT ME ONE LAST TIME
I’ve lost count of the knives you left in my back Because my abacus only goes to one hundred But I think there’s room for one more So, please Hurt me one last time So I can die once and for all Just hurt me one last time So I can die once and for all I’ve lost track of how many hours you’ve left me here Hanging from this noose Because my calendar only measures one year So, please Hurt me one last time So I can die once and for all I’ll sleep sound in my gave I’d like to thank you for digging it for me I wouldn’t have loved you unless I wanted you to kill me I wouldn’t have opened up unless I wanted you to steal from me Love is a sward You live by it, you die by it Unfortunately It’s the sweetest blade to ever pierce my skin One more knife in my back One more day on the noose Promise you’ll let me die for once And for all Pretty please Hurt me one last time So I can die once and for all Hurt me one last time So I can die once and for all Hurt me one last time Hurt me one last time Hurt me, damn it For one last f**king time |
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Jan 8 2005, 03:56 AM
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Brie Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,172 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,548 |
Nice.
I like this one a lot. "One more knife in my back One more day on the noose Promise you’ll let me die for once And for all Pretty please" ^ I love that part. I just.. love it. Great job, as always! |
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Jan 8 2005, 01:31 PM
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 my <3 is in Ohio Group: Member Posts: 899 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,599 |
you write a lot of really good poems. and this one is really great too.
I wouldn’t have loved you unless I wanted you to kill me I wouldn’t have opened up unless I wanted you to steal from me Love is a sward You live by it, you die by it Unfortunately It’s the sweetest blade to ever pierce my skin i like that part. good work! |
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| *stephinika* |
Jan 8 2005, 08:37 PM
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very nice. i quite like it. the feeling put into it is great. good job.
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| *Kathleen* |
Jan 8 2005, 10:53 PM
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Ahh. Is this about someone I know?
 It reminds me of how it was with Dave...
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Jan 9 2005, 01:07 PM
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 Canadian Boyfriend, I think it's time Group: Member Posts: 450 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 40,705 |
QUOTE(ryfitaDF @ Jan 8 2005, 2:19 AM) I’ve lost count of the knives you left in my back Because my abacus only goes to one hundred But I think there’s room for one more  Marry me now. That's my favorite part from there. Would you mind if I used that to make a graphic? I really like that quote. ^^ That was so awesome. I already told you everything else I had to say. 
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Jan 9 2005, 01:37 PM
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LunchboxXx Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810 |
QUOTE(TreesTurnMeOn @ Jan 9 2005, 1:07 PM) Marry me now. That's my favorite part from there. Would you mind if I used that to make a graphic? I really like that quote. ^^ That was so awesome. I already told you everything else I had to say. hehe. okay. i'll go get the ring  and, sure, you can use it for a graphic |
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Jan 9 2005, 01:50 PM
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Canadian Boyfriend, I think it's time Group: Member Posts: 450 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 40,705 |
QUOTE(ryfitaDF @ Jan 9 2005, 1:37 PM) hehe. okay. i'll go get the ring and, sure, you can use it for a graphic Whoot! Thanks..I'm working on it right now. ^^ |
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Jan 11 2005, 06:52 PM
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 i'm susan Group: Official Member Posts: 13,875 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 5,029 |
When I read all of your lyrics.
It sounded like a hard rock metal type of song. I guess that's how you wanted it to be. But anyways it's okay. I'll say 8 out of 10. Because it's 8 out of 10 is because I didn't like when you mentioned the knife part, sounds too violence, eh? But the rest --- it was good. Some art and emotions you did hehe. |
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Jan 17 2005, 01:13 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 42 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,705 |
WOW... =P
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Feb 4 2005, 08:04 PM
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 dizzy me up. Group: Member Posts: 3,191 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 11,139 |
wow i loveee your work. it sounds soo wow. lols
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Feb 5 2005, 05:55 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 5,585 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,082 |
It sounds like a song. Lol nice job!
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Feb 5 2005, 07:30 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Posts: 8,274 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 8,001 |
LOL, i like the last sentence.
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Feb 6 2005, 12:41 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 62 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 66,860 |
thats deep and u know what i like i like so keepin doin them poems
signed, JOhn |
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Feb 6 2005, 11:49 PM
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Really great poem, John. I really like this one. *clap clap clap*
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Feb 7 2005, 08:09 PM
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 stephanie .. Group: Member Posts: 1,965 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 15,529 |
That's really good (as always) LunchboxXx but a little creepy lol.
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