lyric, "what i see" Options

[jr0h]

GUESS WHAT!

"What I See"

i lived in a lie
it went towards you
its time that you realize
that this is what i've gone through

i forced smiles
i faked laughs
you thought I liked you
But I hate you

each time i see you
it makes me want to die
i act like a friend
but there's evil behind

you have no respect
just the ones for yourself
when will you notice
that there's something not right

everytime i see you
makes me want to admit
of how much i despise you

but there were some times
where you didn't recognize
the confesses i told you
my feelings inside

this is my expression
this is my expression
this is my expression


...what do you think of that? its supposed to be rock by the way.
rate 1-10
10 being the best
1 being the worst

edit// uh i need to change the title. it should be "My Expressed View"

i have a habit of keep on changing the titles of songs..lol srry

[angel-roh]

jenny it's hard to understand your freaking lyrics. i like these words better though..

i forced smiles
i faked laughs
you thought I liked you
But I hate you

yeah heh... nice. your title and the song doesnt go right.... it should be um "Truth Hurts" ehehehe?

[heyyfrankie]

i would have to hear it but it sounds good as a poem. nice.

[RandomHero]

Hmm...I think you should focus on one topic..like keep going with "living in a lie" or "but i hate you". I just got confused when i read it...but maybe thats what you were going for?

[jr0h]

its about this one dude not noticing that i dont like him and he thinks i do like him and hes not noticing that and then im just expressing my view of him. which is why its called 'my expressed view' . maybe its not clear like that in my lyric? my bad..i might need to do some editing.