if i should die before i wake... |
 Dec 14 2004, 04:41 PM
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 my <3 is in Ohio  Group: Member Posts: 899 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,599  |
IF I SHOULD DIE BEFORE I WAKE
if i should die before i wake there is soemthing i'd like to know do you love me? or were those words you said just a lie? i feel your soft lips touch mine and i want to know this is real that everythings gonna be okay that you will never leave me cuz i don't wanna let you go i thought nobody would ever love me but you proved me wrong you said i was special, and that i'd always be somebody to you so please tell me that everything we have is real that is the only think i'd like to know if i should die before i wake |
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Dec 15 2004, 01:49 PM
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 i'm susan Group: Official Member Posts: 13,875 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 5,029 |
so this poem is actually saying that you want to know if that person really loved you or was he just playing around with your love life...but the only thing i don't really get is the part when you said "if i should die before i wake" so do you basically meant by not hearing what your lover says because you know he really faked out your love with him? if im wrong, eck help me out then?
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Dec 16 2004, 03:57 PM
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my <3 is in Ohio Group: Member Posts: 899 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,599 |
you have the first part right the "if i die before i wake" thing that's like i want to know how you really feel and like you don't know really if your gonna live or not cuz anything can happen to you so the person's saying tell me now cuz i might not live long enough for you to tell me later. make sence?
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Dec 16 2004, 05:05 PM
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catastrophic sweetness Group: Member Posts: 92 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 58,334 |
I like your screename and sig!
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Dec 16 2004, 06:08 PM
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 Crying Behind Blind Eyes Group: Member Posts: 257 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,967 |
I really like the "If I should die before I wake" part starting and ending the poem. It just...it's a good catch to it, of course I also love the idea of the whole thing. Was it written for someone in particular, I wonder?
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Dec 17 2004, 04:08 PM
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my <3 is in Ohio Group: Member Posts: 899 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,599 |
thank you swtxcatastrophe i like your screen name too! it wasn't when i wrote it i wrote it just because...but now sorta kinda...
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Dec 17 2004, 04:30 PM
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what's love anyways.? Group: Member Posts: 297 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 49,198 |
nice poemmm reminds me of my old days...
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Dec 18 2004, 07:49 PM
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my <3 is in Ohio Group: Member Posts: 899 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,599 |
i see...well thank you for the comment!
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Dec 21 2004, 03:57 AM
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 Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
one word, cliche. It intrigued me at first but it was just the same thing as billions of other poems. Make it more real, make it intense. Paint the picture of the night. Place the feeling that you wanna make thing right before you die.
from 1-10 i give it a 2 |
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Dec 21 2004, 11:29 AM
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my <3 is in Ohio Group: Member Posts: 899 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,599 |
i see....thank you very much for your input
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