Untitled poem, as of yet, I discovered something (gasp) |
 Dec 8 2004, 10:19 PM
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 and they say imitation is flattering  Group: Member Posts: 1,337 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,269  |
So I was looking at old stories I had written and I came across this poem. I thought it looked interesting. And, since I rarely write poetry, I figured I might as well post it up here. I changed some words to make it usable out of context.. and to just make it better.
Life was pure black, ‘Till you turned it white, You gave me breath, You gave me life. All that I knew was despair and gloom, ‘Till you loved me, Then all I knew bloomed, For the first time I'm free I saw not life, just what came late, A perfect existence, there never could be, I never believed in what you call fate, But now it is all I see. All around me was death, ‘Till I had not enough, You gave me breath, You gave me love |
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Dec 9 2004, 07:20 AM
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 Dark Lord of McCandless Group: Member Posts: 2,226 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,761 |
Hey that's pretty good.
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Dec 11 2004, 11:19 AM
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Aww I like it.
 You have old stories you wrote? You should post 'em here, too. 
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Dec 15 2004, 02:24 PM
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 i'm susan Group: Official Member Posts: 13,875 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 5,029 |
aww that's very cute. it's like your lover is refreshing your life to a happy world^^
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